This is really a very sweet poem...
the comparisons are amazing...
=)
i love that part when you speak about love...
it's so emotional and truthful...
*keep on*
isabel

I really like the concept to this poem. Its very deep and beautiful! :)

You can almost feel the love in this poem. The emotions are very strong. Good Job.

Aww, Noha! I think your poetry has definitely improved. I really liked the metaphores you used in this one. I also liked when you were describing his green eyes.

What I'd say you need to work on is the flow, and grammar. Try proof reading your poem before submitting it, just to catch some of the mistakes. If you have trouble finding mistakes, ask someone else to proof read it for you. I'm sure someone would be happy to help. I'd help if you wanted me to. Just send it to me in a message and I'd be more than happy to correct your mistakes.

I really did like this poem! Great job! ^.^

Keep writing!
Cayce

Hmm, the form was different deffinatley i liked the risk you took, great job on that, but personally i always like poems that are written in stanzas..... again fantastic job!

polaroid

I love how you put in words of his color eyes and yours., im guessing yours are blue. to make since in all that. Its really different but very good i think, you did a good job. i really enjoyed this and you spilled your heart to the guy with the green eyes how much he means to you and how much you feel toward him.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

It's got great flow and comparisions, I prefer stanza's but you may juat have changed my mindX] Awesome job.

Thz for the comment and thz again cayce and i will try to let someone help me and i think its u.

And as katlynn as my eyes are.......................................not blue but brown^_^

Oh such a nice concept. the kaleidoscop of images is breath-taking, and i like how you start with decribing eyes, then go for describing love, and then turn back to eyes.

i like how you make 2 parts of a line rhym. i just feel in this line some trouble with rhym:

every word you cant say....your eyes can tell me.

i suggest changing it to something like:

every word you cant say....your eyes can convey

in these lines something went wrong with grammar:
love is an eye need to cry.
love is a heart need to beat.
love is a song need to hear.

maybe you could change it for "needing to cry/beat/etc" or "in need to cry/beat/etc"?

and btw the signature:

"this is from (deep blue ocean) to (full moon eyes)
from (noha) to (amr). "

is very romantic

5/5

Its good.
The grammar could be a bit better and the way its set out.
But it flowed well and the emotion was shown.
Well done 4/5

Thanks for the comment and lizaveta i realy thank you as you try to help me in good way , thz all

I absolutly loved the flow of this poem. Your word choice was good and the imagery was good as well.

However, I believe this could of been a lot more powerful if you made it in stanzas.

For example lets take the first few lines:

"Deep green eyes....my full moon eyes.
deep look in to your eyes....makes me melt like ice.
deep green color....like beautiful flower.
deep feeling of fear ....it looks so clear."

And make it into stanzas like this:

Deep green eyes,
My full moon eyes.
Deep look into your eyes,
Makes me melt like ice.

Deep green color,
Like a beautiful flower.
Deep feeling of fear,
It looks so clear.

With doing stanzas like so, it makes the reader understand when and where to pause as well as making the poem flow a little bit better.

Also, some puncuation like I've just added in the example above would help as well.

Overall a well written piece of poetry. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Okay thz alot and i like stanza... i will try it

I fr*ck*n love this poem that you went at it seemly unbelievable - words cannot express wowza - raindrops 5/5

I feel good that you like it, but i realy love him thats why yous see it in this way

I liked this poem..I kind of got lost in the middle, but I found the flow I really liked it. 4/5.

Like everyone else said, there's a good flow to this poem. I really didn't like the first stanza.

"deep look in to your eyes....makes me melt like ice."

That made no sense whatsoever.
"Look deep into your eyes" would make more sense. I didn't like the fact you used the word 'eyes' in almost every sentence in that verse.

It was a good poem. Needs to be editted for grammar.

Good poem, but the structure isn't good and has some mistakes. I liked it to. 4/5

Good use of imagery and emotions 5/5