Comments : A Canary's Dying Song

  • 9 years ago

    by Lemma

    This is so sad, the wistful almost hopeful message makes all the more heartbreaking. This is really different to a lot of the poems I read and felt really fresh. I especially love the ending, the repetition again adds to the mood of longing. My favourite stanza was:

    "
    If only I could spread my wings
    I would fly off into the distance
    Be who I was meant to be
    Do the things I was born to do"

    5/5

    Em xXx

  • 9 years ago

    by Kaila

    This poem really got me thinking.
    I love poems like that!
    You made me think who do I want to be.
    What do I want to do.
    Lovely job here indeed
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Aww this poem was sooo sad but yet so beautiful!. It relates a lot to the poem I just read about the chain linked fence..

    I love your style of writing. It keeps me interested and holds my attention throughout the entire poem and I really feel each and every word you write.

    You did another yet amazing job on this one. Keep writing! 5/5 again =)

  • 9 years ago

    by Natalie

    Well Darien.. I wish there were more poets on this site like you. :P

    Beautiful poem. Loved the term flying. I think alot of us wish we could just fly away, and do whatever it is we really want to do.. and be who we want... or even escape from things?

    Great job as always!

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    This poem was so very sad and heartbreaking. Being held prisoner in your home is not a good place to be.

    My cage, my home, my life
    Held captive from the world
    I crave the taste of fresh air
    I long for the need of freedom

    This stanza really touched my heart and soul. For I long also for fresh air and freedom. The imagery is awesome. The emotion I felt while reading your words brought tears to my eyes.
    Excellent job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Brandon Lee

    I like this it makes me think of one of my favorite quotes regardinga bird and freedom to fly. I would like to know what inspired you to write this if you would'nt mind telling.
    anyways it was very entertaining. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    It was a sad poem.it left me in tears after i read it.great job!u really know how to show emotions.5/5
    **harlea

  • 9 years ago

    by Blissful

    Wow this was just beautiful. I've owned many canaries before so this nicely written title captured my attention. One can take this poem literally and see about its about a canary but one can also relate this to people who feel as if they are locked with no way of escape and long for freedom. Either way this was beautifully written and I enjoyed reading what you had to say. Well done *5/5*

  • 9 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Gr8 simile... (Sorry for a bad figure of speech)... Boss, I need to confess that I felt as if it wasnt just a canary's dying song. In fact it has to be the dying song of all those humans who are trapped behind an invisible cage of mental, emotional and social barrier.

    You seriously made me think as if there was no difference between the canary that you described and the people bound by freedom. We poets are lucky for being able to break these cages through our writings. Thanks for making me realise through this beautiful poem of yours.

    You deserve kudos for this poem and an entry in my list of favorites.