Comments : Forget The Past; He's Her Future

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    That was very dedicated piece! the whole line filled w/ deep and fabulous emotions. i like those thougths its simply express the words and it was meaningful! keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh I just loved this title because it was so unique and refreshing to see. The whole just blew me away my dear. The way you described your yearning emotions was amazing because I found myself lost within your words. You made each scene easy for me to relate with and the words you choose to express emoiont was flawless. This has to be one of my fave poems by you ... amazing. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by RB

    Beautiful poem. i was able to relate to it in every single way, in every single stanza. flow was good, and i loved the words you used. its such a truthful heartfelt poem, and i've been through exactly what your describing. i always love being able to relate to other people's poetry. amazing job, and i loved the title. keep up the amazing work!! :) 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Amazingly written with a great concept! But I'm gonna call this a "Poetic write" it tells more of a story through the poem. And it's lengthy-er than the average poem's structure. It's brilliant, well-written, has a great flow, and a wonderful concept. I'm sure a lot of people can relate... 5/5 (still amazed at how well it was written)

  • 16 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This was so sweet! But it was really sort of deppressing as well, I loved it though, it was absolutely captivating and beautiful to read.
    It flowed really well too, and I really liked your word choice.
    5/5
    ~gabriella

  • 16 years ago

    by Jo Anna EL

    Oh wow.The emotion in this made me almost cry.you make it so heartfelt and warm.I loved it.Its on my favorites list and you are too.Your work is beautiful never stop writing.I'll read more of yours...
    ~Jo Anna EL

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Ending is truly interesting but overall, honestly this is nice poem but I personally am not to impressed with it. I love mostly dark poems with a lot of metaphors. I think that atmosphere would be more intense if you add some more creative words to express emotions on more vivid way, and the thing that left a negative impression on me is the fact that you used -she- too many times.
    I don't want to offend you I just personally don't like this piece too much, but I prefer other type of poetry.

  • 16 years ago

    by PoEtiCmYme

    Sweet
    emotional
    intense
    obsesive
    but overall a greatly worded n powerful poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    A nice lttle twist to a lost relationship. very effective

  • 16 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    Wow. Great poem. As everyone else has said its very powerful. I love the title, and pretty much everything. The flow and rhyme was brilliant. Great work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Oh my gosh! This was really good! The flow was fantastic I mean it was rhythmatic and easy to read. The word choice was good not overpowering and not bland. I loved the way the point of veiw was placed it really drew in my attention. Nice work
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This poem contain a lot of emotions that were so vivid.. actually i'm not fond of reading long poems yet this one seems so interesting 'coz its contents comprises the truth likewise this one is a very nice poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by JEFF

    WoW your an amazing writer and it shows. People seem to enjoy what you write as I did as well, Thanks for your comment on my poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Perfectly Broken

    Wow. This piece blew my mind away; it was perfect in everyway. "with a smile stained frown" -I really liked that part. The last stanza and the last line were my absolute favorite parts. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brandon Lee

    I love it. I had a friend, a close friend that made me feel that way. Actually she still does. Anyways I can relate to this very well and you wrote it beautifully. bravo! I would give you a ten but I am limited to a five. It is well deserved though.

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem has such strong expression of emotions. I loved the descriptions, and I could imagine the whole poem. The rhymes where good and fitted perfectly. The structure and choosing of words helped the flow and past down this poem's message. Good work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    Great write!

    Superb wording, Great message! I can feel the emotions and sadness...awesome!

    Keep it up!
    Sorry for the delay!

  • 16 years ago

    by halie

    Whoa i loved that poem ...it relies so much on everyones life its crazy how much every one relates to it ... keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Wow great poem. It had depth and meaning and emotion. The flow was good and the word choice was great. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Fabz

    Beauitful.. U r a really good poet. Loved da way it flowed, was written and the message behind it!!

    Brilliant 5/5 x