The Mirror

I would have to say this poem is pretty good. Not great, but good. The repetition was a little much. Try to watch that because the poem will sound utterly boring after a few stanzas.

Another thing I really didn't like was how the rhyme scheme changed every stanza. Sometimes lines 1 and 2 rhymed, sometimes 2 and 4, and sometimes none at all. Pick a scheme and stay with it through the whole poem to make it more consistent.

I do however like the story you've told, and how it unfolded. The emotion in this poem probably saved the entire piece. Sometimes a poem can have shaky rhyming, repetition, and flow, but still be considered good because of the story. I think you realized that, and were perhaps in such a rush to get this emotional story out there while it was still in your head, and that's why you lost it a little on mechanical aspects.

Overall, it's a good story that could be even better by making a few fix-ups.
With love,
~Romancing

Wow for never experiencing this you wrote very well
this is really relatable
She picked up the knife,
And chose to end her life,
And this is the sad song
She sang when things went wrong.
-fav. part
this deserves a 5/5

I am glad you never experienced the desire to harm yourself . Your poem has a unique style

This is so sad, but it's very true. It sucks that people have to resort to that.. Flow was good, message was awesome. I think you could have been a bit more descriptive.. But you still get a 5 from me. Good work.

I like the feeling and meaning but i think you could choose better more discriptive words.
i like the poem in all tho so i give it a 5.