The Proud Soldier

by RobinAnn13   Mar 15, 2008


They're shipped off in great packs
To fight "a pointless war"
They will bleed, they will die
And no one cares anymore

The hot sand blows them down
They lose sense of what is right
But still, they are so proud
For their country, they will fight

Now you say send them home
For this war is all wrong
But they can't turn back now
They've been fighting too long

Their deaths would all be in vain
Because of your mistake
But no matter what you do
Their pride will never break

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  • 8 years ago

    by Christopher Hantman

    Really good.

    Tells the story of our messed up societies views on war perfectly.

    Keep up the good work!
    -chris

  • 9 years ago

    by Lemma

    I like the point of view this poem takes, it's different from most of the stuff I read about wars and soldiers. It's proud yet angry. Nice combination. My favourite stanza is:

    "Their deaths would all be in vain
    Because of your mistake
    But no matter what you do
    Their pride will never break."

    Rhyme felt a little forced at times but otherwise this was great,

    Em xXx

  • Great expression and choice of words and the emotion of it. i love your work

  • Really good poem. I have a friend who just got sent to Irak and his mom can't believe it happened. But anyway, I loved every word you chose to describe it. I felt all the hate you described in this. I absolutely loved it. Good job! 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.