Great Job on the poem. I love the message conveyed in the poem. However I think you could have cut a few of the I's out of the poem. Divide the structure of the poem up a little to make it easier to read. You have given some very profound thoughts in this write and you have a lot of talent.
Take Care,
Kay

Awesome. i absoulutely love your stuff. i love the vulture concept. the way you write realli intrigues me. oh and great imagery by the way.
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