It may just be the last lie she can take .

^fav. line in the poem^

so many men play with their girlfriends hearts and this prjects the image purfectly.
it is very real and raw.
i can see him playing around with her heart. and i can see her heart broken over a boy who should mean nothing to her but means the world.

very well writen and love your work.
:)

Wow! that's ace! so well felt and wonderfuly writen down. it's very deep and meaningfull.

nice job 5/5

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"but within moments he will walk away as if there lips embracing meant as much to him as that guy who took his order at Burger King a few hours back ."
Amazing line. that's my favorite part of the entire poem.
I really liked this poem, I loved the dripping sarcasm. I also loved the style of it, with all the elipses and quotes.
I do wish however that you would have broken it up better. Separate your lines, and make well-organized stanzas.
Other than that, I really loved the sarcasm and feel of this poem. Fantastic write. =]

Oh yes; I'm about to break it down. Haha. Okie dokey, here we go::

"Sometimes , we trick ourselves into believing things are not real . And we always find out too late and a few drinks later"
^ I actually laughed when I read these two lines - Oh, it really is irony for me. :X But I do love these lines. They were beautifully worded and they opened up the poem perfectly.

" Still , she chases after him . She just can ` t help it . . ."
^ So simply worded, yet words are like bullets and these words really hit my heart when reading them.

"Still , she allows him to break her heart - Kiss her like she truly matters , but within moments he will walk away as if there lips embracing meant as much to him as that guy who took his order at Burger King a few hours back . "
^ I absolutely adore these lines. Perfection - topped of with a touch of sarcasm. (:

"Well , sweetheart , I would like to share my two cents with you - Actually , make that thirty . If you do not mind I have a lot I would like to say : You laugh as if it is funny , when really , it is the saddest thing I have seen this month . But I keep forgetting you are under the impression that she has no feelings ;"
^ This whole stanza was amazing. When reading it, I felt so much anger and sarcasm radiating off of every word. Beautifully done.

"" True love never gives up . ""
^ I love how you placed this quote in there -- Very true. >.<

" I know Hun , it is just so hard to imagine . . ."
^ The use of the word 'Hun" was like a slap in the face to this person to me. (: Amazing.

"Either way , use it wisely . It may just be the last lie she can take . "
^ Oh my... you are wonderful. Lol. This was absolutely spectacular. I mean it. So sad and heartbreaking. Phenominal job, m'dear. (: Overall: 5.5

- Steph. <3

Wow.. that wa so deep and powerful. lot of emotion coming through. 5/5 xo

Really amazing poem! I fell in love with it:)

I have no words!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

that just moved me on whole other level!!!