Comments : This poem needs a title as much as i need you

  • 16 years ago

    by jojo

    The title could be like "the perfect relationship" or something cause thats how you write it out to be. Btw, i really like it :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew

    Nice, really nice, i really wish those words were being said to me.. Good work and what a lucky guy.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Awe, this was so sweet and very beautifully written. A lot of passion and emotion in this piece, which you expressed clearly and deeply. The flow was a bit rocky here and there, but a great poem. :] A heartfelt write, an enjoyable read. :] 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Paralyzed

    Very sweet write, nice emotion, the only advice I can offer is to work on your flow, keep your syllables closer together, so it reads smoothly. I have used your second stanza as an example, if I were going to rewrite it, it might be a little something like this:

    I love the way you laugh
    I love the way you sing
    I love the light you bring my life
    Forgetting everything

    Hope I have helped. Good work.