Comments : Tuesday's Coming, Did You Bring Your Jacket?

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    I love the title.
    Not sure how it really relates to the poem, but I think it's interesting when I look at both the poem and the title.
    I didn't one hundred percent catch your flow because sometimes you changed the pattern, but some parts did flow magnificently.
    I loved the concept of your poem, and your word choice was flawless. It was very mature and it captured amazing images.
    Very well done =]
    5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hm. This one is a lot better than the other one.

    First off, I love the title, like all of yours.

    Second off, it made more sense and seemed to flow better.

    Third, though, I hated that there wasn't <much> flow. You really should put punctuation in there.

    Fourth, I did get the meaning this time. Not too bad on it.

    Fifth, you had some cliche rhyming, which I didn't like, but it wasn't too bad.

    Overall, it was alright. Not the best I've read, but better than the other one of yours.

    Sorry, Babe.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5