Beautiful

by brokenbutterfly   Mar 25, 2008


Wind on your face
silent grace
sun beaming
mind isnt screaming
a walk in the park
feels like a new start
setting yourself apart

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  • 16 years ago

    by MeltInHisArms

    I like the sense of peace in this poem, u should add a little more but it's still a 5/5
    xoxo
    ~me~

  • 16 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I liked the first two lines, but after that, the piece just seemed...I don't know, it just seemed like you didn't care, and just wrote anything, sorry.

    Brad

    P.S. Thanks for your comment on my piece...which I can't even remember the name of right now, lol.

    P.P.S. I wanted to read your other piece, but I really, really dislike to read not rhyming poems, sorry.

  • 16 years ago

    by kate

    I liked this one very much, maybe be short but it still told a great story! good job! keep em coming :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Natalie

    Short but inspirational! I liked it! I think you should definately try to make it a bit longer as to make the inspiration last a little longer. Good work nonetheless!

    Please have a look at my poetry and let me know what u think!

    Natalie

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