Comments : You're my everything

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Awwww.....so cute! Just suggestions:

    "cuz i know in your arms im save"
    Save should be safe

    This poem is so adorable, but I think you could make it flow a bit better. It doesn't matter that much, but it would just be a bit easier and more enjoyable to read. Good job, take care!

  • 15 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Awe, a very sweet and beautiful write. This piece was simple but portrays a lot. And you expressed yourself deeply and clearly. A heartfelt write, and an enjoyable read. 5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Unamed

    Wow!!..great job!!.it had that really sweet emotion to it! ;)!
    "You know my every thought,
    you know me,
    the real me,
    and you love me just the way i am,"
    ^^^^ very nice..i wish i had that sertain person that will luv me for who i am..not for something i pretend to be..
    "For this life you've given me,
    how awsome, how wonderful it is,
    you're my everything,
    you're my everything,
    And i give all to you, "
    ^^^ very nice too!....i like how u did the repetition with 'you're my verything'..it has a nice effect to it...and my favoritest line is the very last line!.......i'll stop babbling now!..but i really liked this poem!!!! -going in my favs.

    5/5
    ***aLy***

  • 15 years ago

    by K3LS3Y

    Wow, thats wuz really good. but i guess we were thinking about 2 different thing. i thoughtu were talking about a guy or sumthing, cuz thats how i felt about my ex. but wut u said also made sense. it wuz really good :-D

  • 15 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    Very good poem.
    I believe in God myself.
    Good job!
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Syn

    God is good.

    lol nice write

    -Syn

  • 15 years ago

    by Justin

    Beutiful poem... god is GREAT.... Great job 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Perfectly Broken

    This poem was beautiful. and you wrote it very well. i really like it and you really captured the meaning. nice poem. i really liked reading it. (:

  • 15 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Nikki,congrats.5/5.
    A beautiful write.This poem reflects your faith in the Almighty.Keep writing.

  • 15 years ago

    by Darien

    Not many people write about God anymore. It's good to read poems like this. Good job on this one.

  • 15 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Nice poem =)
    well done good flow! keep it up

    Love
    Jacs
    xxxx

  • 15 years ago

    by Marius Laun

    Wow.......I really liked that. I really know this feeling so it does hit home really close to it actually. Great Work IT is definately going in my favorites

  • 15 years ago

    by bekka dollface

    This is really good!

  • 15 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    Very simple yet beautiful piece. Beautifully written and you express a lot of emotion.
    My favorite part is:

    "You know my every thought,
    you know me,
    the real me,
    and you love me just the way I am".

  • 15 years ago

    by Not

    Aww such a sweet poem to write
    very realistic
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by A Phoenyx in Flight

    This poem is simple beautifull it reall shows how much you believe in god
    i love this poem alot you are a really amazing poet