Comments : Unreachable Dreams (Collab End Of Eternity)

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Scared you will turn me away
    Seems my heart will beat alone
    My desires are all in vain
    Watching my dreams turn to stone

    Though i dont know much abt poetry but i surely know one thing, when someone get an opportunity to write something with as spl person as you are...things are bound to get os beautiful. You are an amazing person, lovely poet and everything an angel could dream of.

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by June

    That was a very touching and beautifully written poem.I think many with a dream can only but watch it turn to stone and so therefore many will relate to the words in this poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lu

    The title is so very eye catching and fits the piece so very perfectly.

    Standing next to a fallen star
    Wishing for you to love me
    Been on my knees forever
    Is that how it will always be
    ^^^
    This stanza creates such clear imagery .... on your knees, staring into the sky as the star falls a wish cast.

    My legs get weak when you're near
    Don't you see stars in my eyes
    You are the prince I've been waiting for
    Can't keep living this life of lies
    ^^^
    The stars in the eyes ... so very gripping. A plea spoken " please see them"

    Years have passed being alone
    Love simply never came my way
    Tired of breathing without you
    Praying you'll come with me to stay
    ^^^
    Yearning shouts from these lines ... and the desire to touch and breath as one.

    Wrap me in your arms of love
    Let our hearts now beat as one
    Melting into passions kiss
    Warmed by golden rays of sun
    ^^^
    This stanza is beautiful. The heart has spoken.

    Sleeping next to a broken mirror
    Wondering if this heart bleeds again
    If only I could have confessed it all
    Never would I have felt this pain
    ^^^
    This one is so sad, and the imagery paints a picture of falling teardrops.

    Scared you will turn me away
    Seems my heart will beat alone
    My desires are all in vain
    Watching my dreams turn to stone
    ^^^
    Now I thought the last stanza was sad ... this one holds so much emotional sadness.
    And the last line is heart wrenching.

    Wonderful piece Nitin & Cindy. You both write so perfectly together ... as though you were one.
    Kudos to you both for a wonderfully penned collab!
    Luanne

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    MMMHHH, such a heart-touching tribute to love! You both did very well on this one dear Cindy and Nitin, I loved every line of it!

    Hugs for the both of you,

    Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Wow...you two never cease to amaze me...once again you've effortlessly written as if it were one...you can tell how close you are by these verses....

    "Years have passed being alone
    Love simply never came my way
    Tired of breathing without you
    Praying you'll come with me to stay

    Wrap me in your arms of love
    Let our hearts now beat as one
    Melting into passions kiss
    Warmed by golden rays of sun"

    ^ So beautifully written....love the image of the golden sun warming the heart....

    "Scared you will turn me away
    Seems my heart will beat alone
    My desires are all in vain
    Watching my dreams turn to stone"

    ^This is the sad turn to love.....when doubts and fears come alive and harden the heart....well done you two!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Elapsed

    This was a truly heartfelt piece.. the desire for love was so well expressed!!..

    "My legs get weak when you're near
    Don't you see stars in my eyes
    You are the prince I've been waiting for
    Can't keep living this life of lies

    Years have passed being alone
    Love simply never came my way
    Tired of breathing without you
    Praying you'll come with me to stay"

    Its getting very hard to tell the difference between the two of you.. with each poem you both seem to flow together perfectly.. amazing job!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Cindy you never disapoint us, good write and may the poets pen in you never die nor your words fail to find us.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sara Sutton

    Awwww!! that is a great poem!!
    <3

  • 15 years ago

    by monica

    ...this poem is so good.
    i hate to say "OMG its soo deep!"
    but really it is.
    hit the spot with this one.

  • 15 years ago

    by monica

    ...this poem is so good.
    i hate to say "OMG its soo deep!"
    but really it is.
    hit the spot with this one.

  • 15 years ago

    by ilu

    AWWW<<<that was well written hun...
    good job!!>..
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    That was very beautiful