That was so beautiful!! you volcabulary is awesome and the flow seems perfect with hardly any rhymes. it seems so creative, the imagery is great, i thought this poem was a bit professional, if you get what i mean. oh, and ideas for title, erm, i guess the last few words would do just fine. but thats if you need ideas. i have to say i've only read one of your poems, ever, this one, and im surprised i haven't read more. i'm going to add you to my favz to keep track.
take care, and keep writing.
x

Quite a taste of irony on the title...
Never seen a poem more creative... :)

"You need me like you needed your appendix and your other kidney"

This is quite an intersting comparison... i don't know how to explain it properly...it's wonderful, yet it creeps me out in some way and i don't know why... :)

"And if you float away, just know that every breath's for you"

This is a remarcable ending...i find it absolutely sweet...

Your poem really has a wonderful imagery...

5/5

*isabel*