Walking Out The Front Door ; I ' m Never Looking Back

by ABake   Apr 8, 2008


Sweetheart , did you really think some fancy rehearsed words could keep me around ? Well I ' ve got news for you ; They won ' t . They used to -- [ But Not Anymore ] My eyes are wide open ; No fog , rain , sleet or even hail can possibly blind me from the damage you are oh so capable of ; I think it ' s about time we do the easiest thing and just let go my dear . . .

I can feel you watching me as I walk out the door ; I hope you realize the difference between this time and the last is that -- I won ' t be coming back [ Ever Again ] You act as if I mean everything to you now , well sweetheart where was this act three months ago ? No need to answer that question ; You just made it up off the top of your pretty little head ;

I have had enough of your lies -- It is time I stand on my own two feet , rather than trying to continue this balancing act we have oh so horribly mastered ; Either I am stepping on your toes , or you ' re no where to be found . [ I Believe This May Call For A Very Proper And Final Goodbye ] My toes were dangling over the edge , and this breeze you caused may have just pushed me over the edge -- Who am I kidding , I am completely gone sweetheart .

[ It Is Time Reality Hit You ; You Just Lost The Best Thing That Ever Happened To You ]

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  • 16 years ago

    by Gizmo

    I scanned over a few poems, before i even started to comment. all i had to say its woah! you have a unique style which i have never come across in on this site before, its a modern twist to freestyle, that catchs the eye, with the typing as well as the simple lanugage.#

    1st stanza: you said it so blunt, that it felt like something that everyone can connect to. the first line, simply drew me in. do me a favour, never ever change your style its amazing.

    2nd stanza.you can feel the emotion, a mix of 'ha in your face' and 'i'm not falling for this anymore.'its a strong strong stanza, i like the way you threw in the 'sweetheart' and 'pretty little head' it gives a very realistic flare to it.

    3rd stanza: brings the poem, to a fantastic close. you can almost hear you speak these words, to someone you onced loved untilo they changed.

    the last line on its own also works rather well,its a smack up the jaw for whoever you are writing for.

    normally i would tell someone to structure there poem better, but for you personally this style just works.

    bravo. 5/5 xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by LitxUpxWithxLife

    I really liked this poem, the way you hint at what was going on, but never fully say makes it easy for other people to identify with. But you describe your hurt feelings to a 'T'. The ending was fabulous, it definatlely shows how some people completly unaware of what they have until it's gone. Great poem 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Ahh just loved the ending ... I couldnt help but laugh because some guys are just that dumb to let a good thing slip away .. eh who needs them away loll. I loved the strength in your words because it made me believe what you said. The scenes you created with your flawless choice of words perfectly fit exactly what you wanted to say. Sometimes we have these thoughts and feelings in our heads but we dont know how to put them into words .. well my dear you are talented with the gift to greatly affect those who read your poetry.

    "It is time I stand on my own two feet , rather than trying to continue this balancing act we have oh so horribly mastered"
    ^Very unique way to describe the situation. Loved it and your pulled it off.

    Well done *5/5*

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