What We Have

by Dawn aka Dominique   Apr 17, 2008


Sugercanes', Dandeliones, Fairytales
The center of my fantasy
Imagination, Creavity
A gift from the god above
Never take it for granted

Our Friendship, Our Bond
Can never taken away
Your Love, Your Protection
Makes me feel like you care
Never take it fro graanted

My help, My advice
You use it so well
Me,on your side
I always have your back
Never take it for granted

We hang, We're cool
Girls just being girls
Fingernails, Chick flicks, Prank calls
That's totally me and you
Never take it for granted

My secrets, My thoughts
I'd know you'd never tell tell
The key to my heart
Is always safe with you
Never take it for granted

We share together
Our smarts, Our Laughs, Our Pain
You in my life
And me in yours
I will never take for granted

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  • 15 years ago

    by LoveKeepsMeStrong

    I love reading this poem
    and it is amazing
    very well done =)
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Another beautiful write...
    so many people could relate to it..

    "We hang, We're cool
    Girls just being girls
    Fingernails, Chick flicks, Prank calls
    That's totally me and you
    Never take it for granted"

    ^^ very well described..

  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    'graanted' in the second stanza should be granted.

    Overall, I liked this poem more than the other one I've read from you.

    I'll start with the critic: I think that you should revise the whole poem and add punctuation signs on some places that would make the flow better and more effective. Also, I didn't like the repetition of the 'Never take it for granted' because it didn't fit the flow of the whole piece. I think (don't want to offend you, personal opinion only) that repetitive lines should be more powerful and this was quite simple.

    I like the fact that many people can relate to this piece yet it don't sound forced at all- it is sincere and personal, filled with emotions expressed in a really good way. Your descriptions are interesting and this piece brought the smile to my face. Whole poem holds great beauty and positivity.

  • 15 years ago

    by Unamed

    You have such a good meaning to this. not to take your friends or anybody for granted for they might be gone tomorow.. not sure if i really liked the flow, but its good!
    Aly

  • 15 years ago

    by Dawn aka Dominique

    Thanks you for commenting on my poem I can use all the feedback I can get!