Once again..your word choice and flow and imagery...wow, i just wish i could write like that. this poem is so beautiful and heartfelt...and very professional sounding...just amazing.

But smiles that were permanent, weren't permanent at all,
As they merely dangled from our lips, held by a string...
They faltered and wavered in the cold harsh winds,
And for dear life to our faces did they cling.

^^ definitely my favorite stanza. the imagery and comparison..it's just beautiful. very clever and clear. great job.

5.5

Frickin' awesome poem! i liked how you chose words that could describe what u truly feel... i can actually feel every word you wrote... NICE!

-jan =]

A nice piece, and well written too. At times it seemed like the lines were a little too long, but only at times. I liked you wording and rhymes, too.

Brad

Very touching and passionate poem. it's so beautiful yet sad poem. i loved the choice of words

They say that it is impossible to remember physical pain and as hard as i try I can't remember what it felt like to slam my fingers with a hammer. I do believe though that the pain of a broken heart or lost love can be felt over and over again at will. This poem will bring back the memories of the pain that inspired it for many years to come if it was indeed true love. Nice write bud, peace

I love this poem and can relate to it alot like it was me there. sad to think about it in a way though. great poem 5/5