U gotta hell good imagination if only if only!!!! its a lil short though and i must agree wid hoo eva wrote it isnt very powerful u should try write another version of that poem...one a bit longer and maybe sophisticated it would be really gud i bet ya!!!
Lol this so very much reminds me of a poem i wrote describing scenery as candy. i wish you had extended it a bit more. next time i want to see something bigger than willy wonka's chocolate factory lol this definitely gave me the urge to run to the store and get some munchies. :)
nice use of color scheme and metaphor. cute write. love and peace.