Comments : Broken (Lyric)

  • 15 years ago

    by Janalicious14

    I like it, it was nice..hope you'll have time to read mine..^u^

  • 15 years ago

    by C P Sharma

    I could feel the agony of the lost love and its trailing memories beautifully rendered into poetry. The repetion of the question at the end of each episode deepens the intensity of being betrayed by love. A really good poem. Keep it up.

  • 15 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    Broken...... y do things ever break... who can say? Nice poem... keep writing
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    Best wishz..

    Karan

  • 15 years ago

    by SplitSided

    I like this one...read mine...tell me what you think

  • 15 years ago

    by Forever Broken

    OMG! I loved this poem. It was so deep but brilliant none the less. Great job.

    I'd hoped for more than just an end,
    but broken pieces can never mend.

    ^^^that's my favorite part. You've inspired me with this poem. Thnx for the inspiration. Keep up the great work. 5/5
    ~Forever Broken~

  • 15 years ago

    by noha

    Waw its one of the best i see, i feel like you as we sare the same pain and you write it perfectly.all the pain and love,promises gone a way,its hurt us anyway,i add this to my favoraite well done 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    My friend, you have a talent to write your emotions in papers. this poem so touching and and passionate. i enjoyed reading it as i felt your pain in this poem.

    well done

    "You blamed me for everything that went wrong,
    I should have realized it all along,
    You never really cared from the start,
    I was just another name on a chart "

    this part was wonderfully written, good choice of words

  • 15 years ago

    by Everly

    Love the repition of the one stanza. is this a song? and the way you incorporated different rhyme schemes was nice :) 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Salwa

    Wow ash. that was an incredible read. well versed. written words became easily visual sights on what your heart and mind went through. it's as though the reader will go through EACH and EVERY emotion you did.

    very well done. 5/5

    salwa

  • 15 years ago

    by Extinct Angel

    Very good indeed though i hope that who ever made you break will find that the pieces are hard for u to pick up n maybe someone will beable to help u

  • 15 years ago

    by jane

    Very very good i really enjoyed this

  • 15 years ago

    by Arun Khan

    This was... really strong it took me back into a number of places I had closed long ago.. brilliant work ash, may you never stop writing. God bless you, you have a gift. 5/5
    Arun.

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Loving contest comment

    for this , i can say , :

    frist it si too long , and second i hope you stick with 1 type of rhyming remmber it was a rule in the contest to have a rhyme to follow
    but in general i like this , it si vvery touching , i like it !

  • 15 years ago

    by Muhammad Junaid

    Awsome,i loved your poem(5/5)
    It touched my heart,I came to know that you have very strong emotions.
    I would like that you read my poems,and leave some comments,i would love if you mark any corrections for me,as i am new,words from your side will mea alot to me.
    Rate my poems as well.
    If you like me,then add me to your favourites
    KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
    Will look forward for your comments and rating on my poems.

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    That was so sad and touchable...I can feel ur pain and here is my favorite stanza:

    you blamed me for everything that went wrong,
    I should have realized it all along,
    You never really cared from the start,
    I was just another name on a chart

    When U do love somebody while he is just playing u...He puts the blame on u and just considers u as a name not a person whom loves him..
    Good job...keep it up:)5/5..