Comments : I Am Rose (Prose)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Luanne,

    Yes, you are a rose... a beautiful one indeed.
    You have put so much of yourself into this verse, I love that.
    But...you will never be really alone, my dear girl. You will always have us, your friends to hold your hand:)

    Love, Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    This is such a powerful and moving piece. awesome imagery.

    Each step more atrocious than the last.
    Slight slopes then a small dip.
    It is then when I pause, though only
    momentarily to catch my breath.
    Steeper and steeper it becomes
    small rocks below me, even bigger
    boulders ahead.

    Sometimes I wonder how much we can carry on our shoulders before we fall. Why there are some who are given more to hold. You are an insperation to me.

    Darkness thrusts at a golden sky.
    It begins to rain, oh! how I cried.
    Stabbing penetration!
    But the tears wipe away, they always do.

    The tears others see do wipe away. But the ones we have inside do they ever leave?

    A little further on, a bend in the trail
    causes me to stumble.
    Falling over the edge, my fingertips grasp
    for anything to hold on to.

    And hold on you do my dear friend. The will to go on is so strong. This I admire in you so much.

    I can see the top now, oh! so beautiful.
    Reaching out, can almost touch the sky.
    Engraving my name into soft sand that
    once use to be cold, solid rock.
    Bend to smell the sweet wild roses,
    survivors of the cold harsh days of past.
    I am survivor, I am rose

    This stanza says so much about you and your character. Regardless of the thngs placed in your path you find a way around them and to move forward.

    Things get worse before they get better.
    There ain't no mountain high enough,
    that I can't climb.
    Even if someday it is alone!
    I will survive.
    I am rose ...

    The ending is wonderful Luanne.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Emma

    It's such a powerful piece and so wonderful to read aloud, very moving xxxx

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    My interpretation...Someone hurt you both physically and mentally (and maybe sexually)and everytime you felt like you were getting past it something else would happen,your parents lecture you over and over when all you really want is their comfort.you finally reach a point where you know you are strong and you will survive,like a rose that returns regardless of how hard the winter.
    a beautiful write Luanne.

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats Luanne :) Big Hugs !

  • 9 years ago

    by disturbed one

    I agree with Deana's interpretation. Very well written poem. I know I dont usually leave very long comments but this one is just leaving me at a loss for words...not really sure what to say :D you are obviously a very intelligible people to be able to write like that, keep it up :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ixora

    Amazing hun. this part hit me hard:
    "I'm dangling just an inch above death
    and a foot below insanity"

    though i loved the whole poem. it has a personal interpretation to me but i suppose every poem does so with its readers. you're a very talented writer.

    *^*crow*^*

  • 9 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Congrats on the win...well deserved!

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Wow!!! that's just beautiful, I love how you ended it positively.
    You must've been through a lot in your life for it to be this hard, but I like the way you looked at it... keep that positive attitude, it might be the only thing you have to go on... good luck

  • 9 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Quite a write, filled with metaphorical meaning and open to a wide array of interpretation. My take, One climbing out from the pit of addiction and all the trash that follows with it. Somewhere realizing a drastic change is needed.
    "Darkness thrusts at a golden sky"
    It is very hard, this cycle of lows and highs, there are always setbacks, relapses and broken hearts. Very painful but with one goal in mind, overcoming is never easy. There is Light at the end of the tunnel, with strong determination and prayer. This poem stands as a Testament to what was once a cold, solid rock(heart). The engraved name in soft sands are your Poems. Overcoming the Abyss and through the crusted dirt, growing into a Beautiful Rose, a survivor with thorns as reminders of the past.
    Congratulations on a fine work!
    Peace and Blessings

  • 9 years ago

    by PHOEBIX

    Wonderfully inspirational.
    Describes so well how it feels to get through something painful. Up the mountain, eh? Mine is more like a long, dark tunnel that I must crawl through to get to the light. I like the imagery here. Well done. :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    Luanne, You are a beautiful rose and a shining star, such a inspiration to so many and I'm simply almost lost for words...This is a beautiful piece that truly touches the heart...beautiful job, our sweet beautiful, Precious ROSE!....l
    ove ya, Ann

  • 9 years ago

    by mark swaggerty

    When i read this i am reminded of some of my own heart aches, i really enjoyed this peiece. i see why you won

  • 9 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    WOW! That was bloody marvelous. :) I loved it. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Danny Bloom

    Incredible!

    It never gets boring. I love people like you on this site. Their talent makes it worth going back on this computer so often.

    Inspiring, symbolic, and interpretive. What makes a poem onto my favorites list!

    Btw,

    Things get worse before they get better.
    Never a mountain high enough,
    that I can't climb.
    Even if someday it is alone!
    I will survive.
    I am rose ...

    ^^^^Rose isn't capitalized. Just a typo but if you have OCD like me it can bug haha.

    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Muhammad Junaid

    Hi,
    I have read your peoms,they are GREATTT...i am impressed,I will be greatly honoured,if you comment on my poems,atleast mark corrections,or give some suggestions,please,your words will be of great importance to me,
    Thanks

  • 8 years ago

    by Fan Angeleo

    Thanks for the invitation to your club, I don't do as much writing now. I will read through more of yours until I get a chance to write some more. This was good keep on writing.

  • 8 years ago

    by Fan Angeleo

    Thanks for reading my poetry I will read some of yours and vote and comment, I will also check out the club. I liked your poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by Fan Angeleo

    Thanks for the invite to your club I must check that out, your poem here was a good read.

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    See how many interpretations you get from this. No matter the struggles we all face many can relate to this piece. I think it is about having a terrible illness and instead of giving in and giving up, you use all your strength to hang on and move past the pain and suffering for the better days and then you grasp them and make the most of them. This was such a powerful and thought provoking piece. Excellent imagery and use of metaphors. In a literary sense a beautiful job and in an emotional sense excellent, inspiring and heartfelt. What a well deserved win. You are an inspiration to many people, especially those who have the pleasure of knowing you!