Very refreshing title.

-Charred thoughts of those moments arise,
trigger nerves;
Shivering, trembling.-

^I like this opening lines, very powerful and captivating, your choice of words is original and you described intense passion on elegant and creative way.
Though after -;- shouldn't be capital letter.

-A phobic feeling crosses the mind,
left in trance;
Amorous, stunned.-

^Another stanza in which you expressed a lot, I truly like your new style of writing, in your latest work you are able to describe strong feelings with little words.
And here also first letter in last line shouldn't be capitalized.

-Filled with joy beyond comparison,
hearts of gold;
fulsome, frisson.-

I think that you could use better word than -joy- I don't like it in first sentence, but other than that I truly enjoyed in this stanza too.

-Hobson's Choice is the finale,
one gladly performed;
love, delight.-

^Honestly, in my opinion, this part wasn't fantastic as the rest of the poem, in all other stanza I could say that they posses very deep emotions and this seemed random to me, I don't like the tone of this lines, but that is only my personal impression.

-Oh, what a wonderful feeling.-

^This is great ending line, I like the rhythm which you closed with it and somehow narrative and still personal tone. Truly excellently written, simple and effective in the same time.

Overall I must congrats you on your writing, I am really glad that I read this, this is great piece.

First off, the title is amazing, so captivating and original.

I like the style and format of this piece a lot, is is refreshing and whole poem is really creative. I like your choice of words and all those effective descriptions through the stanza. This is one of the most original love poems I've read in a while and I admire your writing abilities because your creativity shone through this poem.

- A phobic feeling crosses the mind,
left in trance;
amorous, stunned.-
^^^
Breathtaking stanza, my favorite one. I can deeply relate to this and I think that you expressed emotions here flawlessly.

- Hobson's Choice is the finale,
one gladly performed;
love, delight.-
^^
Greatly said, very creative and interesting.

All in all, this is deeply enjoyable read with great rhythm and captivating atmosphere within every stanza.

Keep up!

Very nice flow in an original style The word choice and theme is wonderfully thought provoking and profound

A beautifully written and unique poem to read...love the style and flow...5/5...

Oh, my! What a unique style to this piece. You said so much with so little. The third staza almost broke the flow, but it still worked. Good work for someone so young!

Aww i hate reading short poems.. makes me feel unsatisfied especially if it's a good poem...
damn girl ur good.. ilabschu already =] ur cue too.. loll

Oh how sweet!

Ooh a unique title, love to see a new title in a love poem.

Charred thoughts of those moments arise,
trigger nerves;
shivering, trembling.

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I love this first stanza because It's relatable and pulls the reader in, intriguing them to see where this will go off to.

A phobic feeling crosses the mind,
left in trance;
amorous, stunned.

~~~
An excellent choice of words which made this flow very well, a very unique structure I have never seen before.

Filled with joy beyond comparison,
hearts of gold;
fulsome, frisson.

~~~
Loved the emotion that was set behind this stanza followed up by another extraordinary choice of vocabulary complimented by a nice comparrison

Hobson's Choice is the finale,
one gladly performed;
love, delight.

~~~
Thanks for the definition of "hobson's choice" was refreshing to see a phrase I had not know before, But it seemed to lack a certain something that the other stanza's had, just kinda didn't fit the mood.

Oh, what a wonderful feeling.

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A very simple but perfect ending to this poem though Kept to the flow and inflicted a lasting impression.

Overall I loved the structure of this poem, it was very unique. It had a great flow and was saturated with emotion. I enjoyed the fact that you didn't try to rhyme every word, It gets old every once in awile. A very refreshing add to the love section. 5/5 great write keep it up.

I love this poem by far!! KEEP WRITING HUNNI! I LOVE IT! 5/5