Unrequited

by Hatori   May 4, 2008


Two lives, so different,
bound separate paths yet
joined in between.
One pushes away,
the other persists.
Though in the end,
there's bleeding wrists.

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Wootah! Finally wrote another dinky poem. Been what...... almost half a year or something?

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  • 14 years ago

    by ilikepurple222

    I wish this was longer because i think you could've made a really great storyline out of it. but i do like what you have. i'm not sure though if your words mean that there's a relationship and one person is wanting to stay in the relationship, but the other doesn't. so the bleeding wrists is slightly literal? like one person gets hurt in the end?

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write, kind of short for my liking, but the meaning was there so it is fine. I'm not to fond of the whole "bleeding wrists" part of the poem, but hey everyones different. Overall a nice short and to the point poem.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write for me. It was indeed short and I would've liked to see it a bit longer. However saying that, it was to the point which I like in short poems. Overall the concept behind this poem was different which I enjoy reading in poetry. Good Job, keep up the work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    I liked the poem. I seemed to appreciate the smaller poems lately.

    I enjoyed the read, though it was sorta Emoish with the slit of the wrist.

    I think that it coul hav been expanded upon and done more with it's too bad that it was so short.

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    That's deep. The message you send makes me think of duality or confusion. 5/5