Look at me

by jane   May 5, 2008


Just look at me
Really look at me
Look not in my eyes
But in my soul
For if you look there
Your soul will find its mate.

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  • 15 years ago

    by lisabrighteyes

    Wow I really liked this one!
    5/5 keep it up!

  • 15 years ago

    by Ash

    Nicely written. Short, sweet but still with a melodic effect overall. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    I liked the shortness of this poem, however; I also felt that you could've elaborated and made this into a longer poem which would've suited it better in my opinion.

    Also, You didn't use any puncuation. Puncuation helps the flow as well as the overall structure of the poem.

    ``````````

    Just look at me
    Really look at me
    Look not in my eyes
    But in my soul
    For if you look there
    Your soul will find its mate.

    ^^Ok as I stated above puncuation is a big part of poetry, so for example:

    Just look at me,
    Really look at me.
    Look not in my eyes
    But in my soul;
    For if you look there
    Your soul will find its mate.

    ``````````

    Short and to the point, nice little write, keep up the good work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Indian Comma Bean

    Very interesting, seen it before but everytime I read poetry like this it's always a surprise and original, very powerful yet short, keep it up I'm looking forward to reading more.

  • 15 years ago

    by Pink Romance

    Short. nice. to the point. made sense. gave me a smile =].

    over all ill give it a 5/5

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