Comments : I Need You Now

  • 10 years ago

    by Blissful

    I really enjoyed the style you chose to write this piece because it truly fitted what you had to say. The emotions were and ones I could tell came straight from the heart. The feeling of missing someone and wanting them there is one I am sure many could relate with which made this poem even more of a joy to read because I could see myself in your words. The flow was great and the message was filled with power. Well done *5/5*

  • 10 years ago

    by SuicideNotes2Poems

    I know none of us know exactly what you going through, but the way you described your emotions; we can almost imagine the pain and anger your going through. its full of powerfull emotions, you did great expressing yourself. keep up the good work.
    =]

  • 10 years ago

    by noha

    Beautiful poem ,i know how you feel when suddenly everything change and fears everywhere,worry kill you slowly,nice to write all this in your beautiful words,well done,5/5

  • I really liked this poem for being a free verse... I can relate to a certain degree to this poem.. I think I've been about 2/3 of the way there from what you are feeling... but not all the way... either way.. I could tell all the emotion you placed in the poem and it showed through while reading it. Good job! Keep it up. 5/5

  • I really liked this poem for being a free verse... I can relate to a certain degree to this poem.. I think I've been about 2/3 of the way there from what you are feeling... but not all the way... either way.. I could tell all the emotion you placed in the poem and it showed through while reading it. Good job! Keep it up. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by holly

    I really liked this poem. I followed the thoughts as they went and the lack of a rhythm made certain words stand out. The emotions in it were clear without having to be overemphasized.
    The echo of the first stanza i thought was good. it gave the poem a certain symmetry and brought back the fact that even though he was a jerk it dosent change the feeling of need.
    Well Done :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Beautiful write... very emotional..

    i like the way you have structured your poem..

    "Where are you?
    I need you now...
    Well more like yesterday
    Or the day before,
    I need you now. "

    ^^ simply and wonderfully written...

  • 10 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Again I enjoyed your write. This one was very interesting and i really like how you changed stanzas. Thought your final stanza well employed

  • 10 years ago

    by andhereIstand

    Where are you?
    I need you now...
    Well more like yesterday
    Or the day before.
    these first few lines are great- so easily I can relate to them, and that hooked me right into the poem.
    I love your style- the short lines really show emotion, abruptness. the lines "I was wrong...
    But so were you;
    Jerk." show your confidence in writing, which is really great.
    The way you brought it back around to the beginning in the close was really wonderful. all in all, a great poem. keep writing!

    thanks ahead for commenting mine :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Gooberz

    Hmm actually never saw a poem like this before, but i understand the reason behind it. the part thatjumps out at me is when you call him a jerk it seemed a little childish made you sound like idk 13 yrs old, and the repition of needing him and then callling him that showed a great deal of idk assurance withy yourself. great work i really did enjoy it. -
    Raindrops 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    I love love love this poem, you suck!

  • 10 years ago

    by ReinaPuente

    I really like this poem i can really feel its pain