A cutters afterlife

Wow, very powerful. i can relate with this so much. >.> i enjoyed reading this, it's definitly one of the best cuttere poems i've read. excellent job.

WOW!!!!
it was great and i could relate to it!!! good job Mark!!!!! 5/5

*shivers* I can relate to this, unfortunately, but this did not sound like the typical cutter's poem. It was more thought out.. better wording.

Between life and death
exist a fog of souls
within your really first breath
you walk among the undead ghouls
^^ In the third like I don't like the word "really" there. It didn't make that much sense to me, and I just think there are some better words that could be used, or maybe just take it out altogether.

forever here you have to stay
while fear surrounds you day by day
no road you see, no love you feel
and you wounded heart will never heal
^^ In the last line "you" should be "your". I think you need to capitalize the beginning of the lines, just proper grammar, and it makes the poem look more neat and organized, more appealing for the reader.

This was really a great poem, definitely one of the best cutting poems I've ever read. Just take my suggestions into consideration, but don't feel obligated to change anything, because this it -your- poem, and if you like it, dont't change it. :]

Keep writing!
Cayce

Well i though it was great. i loved it.

The message I got from this is very powerful. Are you saying that people who are not content never rest? If so, I agree.
This is immensly well-written and I rate it 5/5. Great.