Comments : Sleep's Image

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow, a beautiful poem! I really liked your subject and the end was good too! :)

    "Darkness encompasses,
    Stars glitter as planets glow
    My eyes growing weary
    Television screens to snow"

    I like this description here, you really wrote what you felt and all that good stuff.
    Overall, you wrote this poem with passion and feeling. I thought it was just great!

  • 15 years ago

    by XxxBeenThereRockedThatxxX

    Great flow to this one...Loved how simple you made it rhyme too....great write...absolutely perfect!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Deana

    I can relate to this ,sometimes dreams are better than reality,your rhyming was very good ,nice work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Andy

    Brill poem :)!
    your very good with use of words and using them in different ways of describing things too :)
    i think you deserve a 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    All I can say it wow.

    Such a beautiful piece, and my goodness, the words were perfect for this poem.
    I was caught in my own imagination thinking of your dream... it is of a dream, is it not?

    I don't always understand correctly. But this was a divine poem. Very, very quite arcane. Mysterious poetry is always something to look forward to, but getting lost in a poem or a read of any kind is quite marvelous in its own way.

    I understand as such for I've been in that position many times.
    A true poet of class, you are. :) Very much so. Elegant. Artistic. Able to inspire others.
    I have not yet known you, but through your poetry and through the eyes of a poet, many great things are revealed.

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by sleepybear

    Very enjoyable read, I loved the "darkness encompasses" line especially. Descriptive and erotic. Very nice rhythm and good length.

    As someone who has extremely vivid dreams I thought this was a great read.

  • 15 years ago

    by Mello193

    Good poem!

  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Great job! :D The imagery and metaphors you used were clear as day. They were wonderful. The rhyming scheme was magnificent and as always the words themselves that put the whole poem together. Five out of five.

  • 15 years ago

    by Empathy

    This is a fantastic piece. The flow works very well with the poems structure, and I love the theme that you have picked for it. You do a very nice job amplifying your imagery with few words in a poem. I think that is great! Overall I'd say you've done very well here. Excellent!

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    I could relate with this scene of falling asleep and effortlessly entering your dreamworld blocking out the images of reality. I love the rhythm and flow you created here with your words because it made the piece more enjoyable to read.

    "Our bodies nearing,
    Heat radiating, senses tingling
    My entire being losing control
    Thoughts, feelings, stimulating"
    ^I do think the use of the word "control" kind of threw the flow off for me but not too much. Everything else was so flawless that this wasn't even that noticeable.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I believe people love sleep for that reason alone, a chance to escape the worlds reality if only for a little while. Get some blinds and the morning sunlight won't ruin your dreams haha nice job