This was very good. it was very powerful xxx well done xx

Wowzers,
I'm speechless.
This was absolutely amazing...
nothing wrong with it at all.
You did a great job in this, and i could tell you put your whole heart in it.
Wonderful job babe.
keep it up my smexy beast ;]

This was an amazing piece of work for sure, everything you write comes from the heart. an Amazing write indeed. Timothy r

Nice poem. It has a lot of elements that almost make it great. In parts it hits you like a little hammer wrapped in velvet.
Hands shaking against the soil
Tears hitting against the soil
My heart falls from my chest
My heart has ended up in an endless pit of sorrow
This stanza is a good example of what works and what interferes with the flow throughout the poem. Where the lines are short and repeditive, it rolls out like a prayer, or a mantra. But I think the longer lines get in the way a bit. Only my humble opinion, but I reckon if you could find a way to shorten some of those longer lines, and emphasize that dull beating of a breaking heart, this wcould be brilliant. An honest four stars.
Let the Force hang loose
Matt

I feel like this poem was inspired by a total eclipse of your heart . It breaks my heart to know you are not happy at this most celebrated time of the year, though I must give you a 5/5 for your candid sharing