Flaming Hearts

I found the repitition of the word "like" in the poem very distracting...perhaps the word "as" should be used instead....some of the rhyming seems forced and the content cliche.

While I did find the purpose of the poem romantic and sweet the over use of the words like, they, & two too overpowering to let the emotions shine.

A nice effort! Take care, Debbie

I like the poem, your flow is good but you should never use like in a poem. You should use as instead.

Love like the seasons and stages of life vary in character and depth. Each has its beauty and sings its own unique song.

You have worked all of the above into a marvelous poem. The meter was excellent and metaphors charmingly colourful.

Michael

p.s thanks for your support.

Wow, that was really good, your title was very unique and creative and was perfect!

"Like spring rains, so gently falling
They nurture flowers and love birds calling
Like turtle doves, two lovers coo
Two Flaming hearts, we join anew"

This is my favorite, I like how you use lots of adjectives and verbs, don't know what else to say really, it just is a strong true stanza.

"Like winter winds which blow so cold
They numb the body and chill the soul
Like love once shared that now is broken
Two Flaming hearts, that now lie frozen"

This was too wonderful, I love your description and how you say numb the body and chill the soul, that was great! Your ending is very strong and well-structured. A truely flawless peice and a very good poem. 5/5

Bloody hell, that was brilliant! Seasons are a beautiful thing, and each reveal a new secret every time... yet in each season lies a little bit of everything, and... I will put my pen down and begin to write with the ink in my imagination, this was surely quite the best poem I have had the honor of reading today.

You are blessed many times over in literature, and I believe it'll get you far---assuming you haven't gone anywhere yet.

But the possibilities of that is few nowadays and the rates of Hollywood are lowering. :( It's not pretty; however, lovely poem. 5/5