Lots of emotion put in this.great job.5/5
**harlea

Ooo this was pretty. All I could think about was a couple dancing to a song, and then when the song was over, they stopped dancing. Beautifully written. Five out of five.

This was interesting. It was a well written poem, with a saddening theme throughout. I felt, at some parts, that I was reading a story. I feel the message could have been expressed in a more poetic fashion. Sometimes it kind of felt like:

"This happened,
This happened,
This happened,
The end."

Like there was no real story, no imagery, no art within it.

Please don't feel like I'm badgering your poem, haha. That isn't my intention at all. I just feel there could have been more information expression, or even just developing the information which is already there.

However, I do have to say that I adore the title, and the whole idea of two hearts "dancing" together. That is beautiful.

Beautifully written. but I felt like you could have added more to it. but this poem dent a chill down my spine. it was wayy incredible. I really could find nothin wrong with it at all.you have always been an incredible write =)

5/5