Rachel
You have penned a wonderful Monchielle..I love the first line for each stanza that you picked. It has paved the way for your beautiful words.

If teardrops never fell
I'd take my place instead
In the arms of sorrow
To drown in my regret
Wishing for tomorrow

Tears can be the best release for pain and sorrow. Great imagery and flow.

If teardrops never fell
I'd never speak my peace
My heart could never mourn
Or say a sad goodbye
If tears were never born

I love the ending the best. The part where you say if tears were never born. All stanzs leading to your ending telling the what if's without tears. Very unique twist.
Great job!
Love Cindy

That was beautifully written. Just beautiful... 5/5!

Rachel you have done a great job on the monchielle form!

"If teardrops never fell
I'd take my place instead
In the arms of sorrow
To drown in my regret
Wishing for tomorrow"

^ This verse stands out among the others as something special...it conveys such deep and heartfelt emotions....love the "arms of sorrow" insertion...and the wistful wishing last line where hope for tomorrow is hinted at...

"If teardrops never fell
I'd never speak my peace
My heart could never mourn
Or say a sad goodbye
If tears were never born "

^ nicely sums up the feelings of the whole piece...if sadness were not a part of us...would we then be able to feel the intense emotions of love and happiness?

Well done!

Outstanding poem indeed, just loved the complete theme and the way you presented it, awesome. If teardrops never fell, great punching line, life certainly would be plastic without tears.

great poem dear, keep them coming

all the best and take care

Wonderful poem i loved it! it had such a great flow and everything! i hope to read more of your poems soon.

Love the work. The way you work your stanza's is excellent, i am deffinatly going to try the pattern.

Very good poem! Well written! keep up the good work! I enjoyed reading this!

Tat was lovely again dear fren...

I really love n appreciate poets like u bringing out d poetic talent tat a few know exists.......

Itz always good to learn from such forms n leaving aside d poetic form..

I really loved this poem... It was flawless for me...

Keep it up..

best wishz.. karan

Borne can refer to:

Borne, Overijssel, a town in the province of Overijssel in the Netherlands
Borne, North Brabant, a smaller town in the Netherlands, near Schijndel
Borne, Ardèche, a commune in the Ardèche department, France
Borne, Haute-Loire, a commune in the Haute-Loire department, France
Borne, Germany, a municipality in Saxony-Anhalt, Germany
Borne, an Australian alt-rock band.
Borne is the name given to a 'waymarker' on Liberty Road (La Voie de la Liberté) in Northern France, commemorating the Liberation of France.

In the UK:

-borne - a suffix for a place name, using a form of Bourne (placename)

Ummmm, nope, it wouldn't have fit right.

Ack that must have been hard to do O_o" so many rules, making the word choice pretty limited.
but you pulled it off
n_n

I like the way u write. U commented on a poem of mine sometime back and I would like to tell u that ur comments are always welcome and are more than appreciated. I would like some critiquing from u more often. I'm trying to understand the monchielle type of poem written here but i dont understand the rhyme pattern so if u can help me it would be very helpful.

This poem is so beautiful! I love everything about it. I like how you explained about the monchielle form at the end to those who don't know it. It's great that one can read a poem and learn about different styles of poetry at the same time! Great job!

Nice Work!!!