Comments : Backwards

  • 10 years ago

    by Bugg

    Whew! My brain hurts after reading that!! lol It was cute and I loved the idea of a "backwards" poem. How unique! The only thing I saw wrong (and it's really small!) is the line "Friend a than more is me of thought your that" which would read "That your thought of me is more than a friend". Shouldn't it be "That you thought of me as more than a friend." and that would be "Friend a than more as me of thought you that" in your poem. That's really the only thing I saw! Good job!

  • 10 years ago

    by dandelion

    Ahw!!! my head hurts! lol:) anyway.. i like it.. but it really hurts..ahwww...:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Maria

    This was a bit hard to read with the whole backword thing
    This poem was interesting, but I think you can improve it a little
    For example, "The chip, shoulder your off fall it let"
    What is that suppose to mean exactly?
    Other then that this is a pretty good poem
    Ill give it a 4 out of 5
    - Maria xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Lori

    That was really good! I loved the backwards thing! It was unique and i got a smile out of it! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by shamvi

    This ish kewl..lol..yea it was nice backwards and it sounded nice readin it from left to right too , it could make sense for yoda..

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Clever yet more difficult to read

  • 10 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    This was hard to read and don't you mean right to left? It was very good when I got the hang of this piece....this was very good and you have some talent...great great job...and nice idea of a right to left poem

  • 10 years ago

    by Strange and Beautiful

    Wow that was soo awesome!!! I loved it. I liked the way you wrote it backwards!

    Your such a amazing poet!!!!! talk to you soon chica!

    Call me and e-mail me!

  • 10 years ago

    by Dawn aka Dominique

    Well yeah i'll call soon as i get off the internet what's your numba again and i should be getting my phone back before i come to chicago which is in like 3 weeks we should hang :)

  • 10 years ago

    by MR F R 3 S H

    Nice poem =D but why did u write it like that 4rm right 2 left?....ne ways 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by MR F R 3 S H

    Nice poem =D but why did u write it like that 4rm right 2 left?....ne ways 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    It was a nice poem a little hard to understand though i mean no insult however 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Pink Romance

    WOW! I DIDNT FINISH YOUR POEM BUT I LOVE HOW YOU DID THAT HOLE THING ON READING TI RIGHT TO LEFT I LOVE THAT,,,,, THAT IS REAL TALENT I WAS TOO SHOCKED AT WHAT YOU DID, BUT I WILL READ IT THROUGHLY WHEN I HAVE THE TIME BUT GURL SO FAR I LOVED IT IT WAS NICE FROM WAT I READ SO FAR.

    AHAHAH I NEVR SEEN THIS BEFORE

    YOU GOT SOME TALENT I CAN TELL... TO WRITE A POEM THAT IS LIKE A MIRRIOR IMAGE... KINDA HARD RIGHT =]

    I THINK I WILL RATE YOU ANYWAY JUST CAUSE EHEHEH LOL.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Pink Romance

    WOW! I DIDNT FINISH YOUR POEM BUT I LOVE HOW YOU DID THAT HOLE THING ON READING TI RIGHT TO LEFT I LOVE THAT,,,,, THAT IS REAL TALENT I WAS TOO SHOCKED AT WHAT YOU DID, BUT I WILL READ IT THROUGHLY WHEN I HAVE THE TIME BUT GURL SO FAR I LOVED IT IT WAS NICE FROM WAT I READ SO FAR.

    AHAHAH I NEVR SEEN THIS BEFORE

    YOU GOT SOME TALENT I CAN TELL... TO WRITE A POEM THAT IS LIKE A MIRRIOR IMAGE... KINDA HARD RIGHT =]

    I THINK I WILL RATE YOU ANYWAY JUST CAUSE EHEHEH LOL.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert Anthony

    Nice. Unique,and i loved it....

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Oh, how unique. It's a clever way to right, but as I read through it, I found grammar mistakes in your poem, and at times, the sentences didn't make complete sense. I feel that you should read over it, and edit it. Keep the style, it's amazing, but it's even harder to comprehend when your sentences don't all make sense. Again, try showing instead of telling, because that's most of what you do in this piece.

    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    I think this was a very clever idea, a poem that, when read, it has to be read backwards. like many others, my head hurt afterwards, but it was a nice read, the most different i've read in a long time.
    however, there were some parts of the poem that i did not understand, or had small grammar problems (I'm a bit of a grammer/ punctuation freak :] )

    "Silenced you keeping is inside something and
    Pain a it's and, too me in it got I've
    Violence the wants one no, us for better [it[']s] but",

    ^^ ^^ - it[[']]s - its needs an apostrophe

    "Tip serious the on be to now but
    Know wanna just really I
    [[The chip]], shoulder your off fall it let"

    ^^ ^^ - [[The chip]] ?? What is that supposed to mean??

    "You and me between stay always it'll
    [[Share if you, share I'll and]]
    Too did he if freak I'd, out find won't she"

    ^^ ^^ - "Share if you, share I'll and" which reads, "and I'll share, you if share", i think it's supposed to read "and I'll share, if you share",

    "This say to courage the had only I if
    Paper on down [[write]] of instead
    Amiss [[to]] come ever wouldn't feelings our"

    ^^ ^^ - [[write]] - is supposed to be [[writing]],, take away the [[to]] and it would make more sense.

    "feel to come you what is backwards if and
    Me to comes it when especially
    Deal can we together, alone this in not you're "

    ^^ ^^ - i love this stanza the most.

    The wording wasn't so great, but i could understand what you were saying.

    4/5

    Keep Writing, hun
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~

  • 10 years ago

    by NicoleBaby101

    I loved it!!!!! it was so cool that you made it backwards!!!!! 5/5