Astray

by Krathia   May 27, 2008


Stars of flame
Descended upon us
Like gold-eyed demons of a treacherous sun

A bloodless moon
Pale as a dying smile
Gazed on with a forlorn detachment
Only a broken promise could know

Rivers of tears spilt forth
Onto a barren desert of forgotten dreams
Drowning echoes of cherished times

Hope was too distant a memory...

Sundered forevers
Windswept vows
The stone that once held
A heart and two names
Had been weathered to dust

Love was too sweet a song...

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  • 9 years ago

    by Sourav

    The start and end both are very good. It's very gripping. It's a very touchy piece. Liked it!

  • 9 years ago

    by Lori

    Awww..i like this one..short and simple! Very beautiful too! Good job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Robert Anthony

    Yea it was nice...great job!

  • Wow this poem spoke volumes to me. It spoke about broken promises, forgotten dreams, and about how love is so wonderful and should not be taken lightly. Keep up the good work!

  • 9 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    A breathtaking and poignant piece. it has left me speechless.

    Rivers of tears spilt forth
    Onto a barren desert of forgotten dreams
    Drowning echoes of cherished times
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    this is my favourite stanza. why? the description in it was so amazing.

    Sundered forevers
    Windswept vows
    The stone that once held
    A heart and two names
    Had been weathered to dust
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    and this stanza left vivid images in my mind. it touched me deeply.

    a wonderful write

    5/5

    Keep Writing, hun
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~