Comments : Kiss My Lips

  • 19 years ago

    by East Poetry

    too long, but very good none the less,
    I think you should get rid of alot of the parts that are not your favorites, cuting it down in size by at least half. My favorite piece was the one that went:

    kiss my lips
    when were together
    kiss my lips
    because a kiss is forever

    i almost think that should be the end one. its got a lovely feeling to it. a perfect wrap up.

  • 19 years ago

    by XJulesX

    Wow. I really like this one too. It is a tad bit long, but still it's really good. I can see that you like to like to repeat the title of your poems in every other sentence. I agree with Randy East, and perfect way to end it would be @ kiss my lips
    when were together
    kiss my lips
    because a kiss is forever

  • 16 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    Very touching and wonderful. Such beauty.