Wow...that was awesome..great job...and actually I liked this stanza the most:
Your soul is drowning
Too bad you can't swim
Your soul is drowning
Lost in your sin
I really liked it a lot,I liked the darkness in it and how deep is it...keep it up5/5

This is pretty good. but i cant really imagine it as a song because theres so many repeations in every other line. it just seemed akward to me.

but you did have a good idea though. maybe just take out the repeatition ..that could make it better. but thats just my opinion.

its your song so you know how it sounds.

thats why i hate commenting songs because you cant hear them lol.

but its a decent one. so i still give you a 5/5 since i cant really judge it.

I can tell its a song. but its agreat one. Your soul is drowning
Too bad you can't swim
Your soul is drowning
Lost in your sin
luv that part. The flow and such.