A good idea for this write though I wonder at how long you took working it before you posted?
First stanza correct the time framing as you have present and past in the same line/sentence.
Fourth stanza I would swap line one ans two sort of like:
"So can you hear my desperate need
these simple things from you I plead."
Fifth stanza third line needs editing, two"didn't"s.
I think if you come back to this write and massage it for metre/flow/rhythm it will turn out as nice a rhyme as you want it to be.