As i started readnig, it was bland, kind of like eating plain noodles. spice it up a little. show more passion and emotion.
its short, and the words were a little weak. to have something this short you must make the transitions perfect and the words creative and influencing.
the flow was good, minus a few stumblings i had, like
"Everyday that passes by,
You keep me strong."
that was shorter and plain. it didn't fit with the stanza i mean it fit word wise but it lacked what the rest of the stanze had.
i hope this helps.

Lexie
P.S.
i did like this a bunch though

4/5
imo
by the way good read
overall
and keep on writing!

The sentiment is good but the flow/rhythm is a bit choppy to me which makes this a tough read. It reads as though each line is a statement unto itself.

Aw. This was so sweet. I loved how truly heartfelt it was. Although, I do wish it was longer, because you did such a great job on what you did write.

Absolutely beautiful.

5/5

-Briana

This was beautiful and very cute. you did another excellent job expressing your feelings for this person.. and how amazing they are and everything. overall, it was okay. maybe another one of those poems that was too simple. it seemed like anything anyone could say about someone they love. 4/5

This is so sweet, but seemed kinda common. sweet, sincere, but nothing to catcg attention and to make me go "wow" or "awwww".
well, the "eternity" idea is nice... this poem expresses your emotion, but it's not unque in poetic aspect.
4/5

I love this poem also. It really shows emotion, shows the reader how much you care for this guy you just met. But, at the same time, your style is a little unfamiliar to me. It's more like you are talking that writing. So 4/5, excellent poem. !!

This is short and sweet. i don't think how much power this poem has with the topic of love. you explained it so well. even if it doesn't rhyme. great job 5/5