Comments : I am nothing

  • 15 years ago

    by Shellaine shelli

    Hay darling,
    This poem was so sad and deep
    but very well written.
    2 minor things I picked up which may improve your poem was in the 2nd line you said loneliness and
    careless,
    but I think it may flow better if you say
    carelessness.
    and where you say away from people by my own.
    An idea could be to say away from
    people on my own.
    but those are just suggestions.
    Aside from that I absolutely loved it,
    your words were so
    powerful
    and really hit the reader hard.
    They portray such painful
    details of the loneliness, hurt, pain and despair
    that you face. Great job.

    love
    shellaine

  • 15 years ago

    by sunnah

    Mashallah ur truly amazing and i'm glad i found u

  • 15 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    I have had the same feelings too sometimes before but not to the degree where i want to hurt myself.
    anyway, i really know how you feel but what i have discovered is most people are selfish, no one will care about you unless you show yourself to them, don't wait for them because they won't come. rather than that try to be strong, life is heartless so don't lose yourself to it. grab your weakness and change it to strength.

    and remember, there is always someone care at least one...i care about you :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Excellent poem Heba. I will be with you forever and always, no matter how far we are from each other.... don't worry happiness is on it's way to you.

  • 15 years ago

    by jana

    Mmm nice girl its totally how i feel

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    I won't say that ur poem touched me or it's beautifully written...But I feel like u r speaking for many broken hearts ...U said the words that r inside me..

    I am always thinking about death
    About cutting my breath
    To be away from this torture

    No one feels me
    No one cares about me
    No one understands me

    This part is really wonderful...U got a talent..
    I added this poem to my favorites.

  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    I really feel alot of the words... about being alone and no one understanding. Its hard so be strong!

  • 15 years ago

    by Kelsie

    "I am nothing, I have no existence
    Am far away from whom I love
    And I can't bare this distance"

    This quote is very beautiful, i like this poem a lot because it is very real. i feel what you are feeling, i can pick up the vibe and i really really dug it alot. keep up the great work man. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by LoveTear

    It's a sad sarcastic poem,but don't forget u never alone .... God is always with u and it might give u enough trust in Him not 2think of such horrible things..God always test us with tragedies and dramas but never give us more than we can bear my dear muslimah ! Be strong ;)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lori

    Omg, this was so, SO very sad. But very untrue Heba!lol and I speak for all of us when I say we all love you on this thing. Excellent piece! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Mehna

    So well depicted, as if you gave words to my thoughts, definitely one of my favorites. (but please don't be so upset, life's full of a thousand colours, just have to find them) be happy.

  • 15 years ago

    by sania Ahmed

    VERY NICE POEM HAVING A VERY DEEP SENSATION OF SADNESS.

  • 15 years ago

    by NoUr

    ..deep feelings..its nice to get out wats inside like that in words..wish u feel better just after writing these poems..it's a kinda relief..but dont give up to ur depression..gods there..hav hope always..

  • 15 years ago

    by Aish

    A really good variety of techniques all within this one poem. very raw and emotional! its sad but still very moving.

    5/5
    xx

  • 15 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    Hi there! Actually I like this poem, yet I completely AGREE with our sister SOSO..
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Oh wow, this is really good. you put a lot of emotion into it. i really enjoyed reading this.

    btw, thanks for the comment on my poem. =3