Comments : Your Lies...

  • 15 years ago

    by J u l e s

    Funny when things never change
    Even when you say they will
    But while your off thinking about her
    My life is standing still

    ^^^ I like this stanza but some how "funny" doesnt seem the word to start off a poem. It is very well written stanza just the funny threw me off. Loved the last line

    You tell me that you love me
    When I leave
    You tell me I'm your only one
    And I let myself believe

    ^^^ strange how a person can tell you they love you in your face and it be a complete lie. This stanza was very good even for it being so simple

    I know that you are using me
    But you'll never let me go
    I know that you don't love me
    I know I'm just for show

    ^^^ never let some one do that to you hun. You are so much better then that. Its understandable falling into the first time but letting it continue is letting it go to far.

    I don't know if I can stand
    To see you love another girl
    You know that you broke my heart
    You know that your my world

    ^^^ Its hard to see the person you really like with some one else. But sometimes you have to learn to let go, if he was able to use you when you really liked him. He will do it again, it just showed him you were easy to get to with it. There is someone out there for you that wont do that.

    But while your standing by my side
    I'll believe your lies forever
    Cause everything seems so perfect
    When we are together

    ^^^ Letting your self into a trap that will never end and only hurt you. Will cause more pain on you. You need to escape from it. Not stand around like the fool and get all the hurt from it all.

  • 15 years ago

    by Carolina Moreno

    Hehe well thnks...!!
    but 4 the record...!! This was a long time ago
    he did the same thing once and he broke up then he wanted to get back i said yes but know i was the one the broke up with him..!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Fanny

    Very , very good. i liked it. You kept the flow and you explained yourseld good in the poem. Nice job! keep writing.
    -Stephanie

  • 15 years ago

    by Mia

    This is one of my favorites. Very good and I liked how it flowed.