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I actually loved the last line cuz it was a very suspensful poem and then something oyu wouldnt expect to happen. i like this one alot. i think this my my actual fav lolz

Its like they said, this poem is really good. all ur poems are good. they all have their own deep emotions. like frenchy said u'll find another lover and that one will be better, just dont rely on the blade or a gun to cure ur pain. i give this poem ummm a 5 out of 5. :)

Wow!! love is pain but not to much pain like you are in.. wow! am sorry but please dnt do that.. your'll find another love and new love will be better than this.. wow! ur poems are amazing.. have so much pain and it's so deep ..

Dude wow, that poem is so amazing :D :D

Well its sad poem

The blade cuts good
it helps set the mood
after a hard day
u got to make me pay
[[ that part was really good]]
i loved you so much
but nothing i did was right
you used me for personal gain
then talked bad about me to your friends
[[I would say take bad out, and keep it at then talked about me to your friend, seems to fit more with out the bad]]
you say i love you and go for other guys
i went out and bought a gun and one bulliet
[[ you spelled bullet* wrong simple error to fix]]
and planned to use it that night
i put it to my head and pulled the trigger....
the gun jammed
[[ the ending part some how doesnt fit to me, i dont know i like the poem its just the last part the very last line.]]

I would say change it up a bit the last line, maybe to something a bit different. keep it in the same meaning but maybe different wording

but other then that good poem