Comments : Depression is...

  • This was so good and true. I loved it. Very well expressed.

  • Very good poem, powerful meaning. There's just some things I'd change slightly to give it more flow. When you're using the coordinating conjunction 'and' it can sometimes help a flow and sometimes it can break it, in the last paragraph it's overused and kinda drags the words with it. You might disagree which is fair enough but I was wondering if this helped, it's only a tiny bit changed

    Depression, is worse than any pain
    Depression, isn't a form of insane
    It's a feeling that is deep inside
    When all you want to do is hide

    Hide from the world, and everything in it
    Yourself, your friends, just for a minute
    Lock yourself inside from everything
    And all the pain that it will bring

    But just for a minute soon turns to forever
    You lock yourself inside altogether.
    You're not the person you were anymore
    When you can no longer find the key to the door

  • 8 years ago

    by iFallToPieces

    Wow i feel like this is exactly what i'm going through youu expressed your self well. Great job

    5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Kuro

    Depression is many things for many people. i think that you did a good job summing up that feeling. a very concevable metaphor that most people can agree with.

    very well done
    ~Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Sadespair

    I agree with Ben.
    Great poem.!.Simple, yet perfect.!. Great Job.

  • 8 years ago

    by katie

    Great poem! Could understand very well. Alot of emotions. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by In Darkness I Dwell

    I loved this poem and I didn't find it deppressive but realistic, well.. for me.
    It related to me in fact.
    keep the good work

  • 8 years ago

    by Second to None

    Wow that is exactly how i feel and i have depression. you captured it exactly right!

  • 7 years ago

    by Kuro

    I really like this. although i would like to act funny sometimes, most of the time i feel depressed and you are right. once depressed, its like quicksand. hard to get out of and easy to sink in further. i can relate very easily.
    Well Done
    ~Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by Blackstar

    Like the way you express that feeling.
    Can just feel with the poem.
    5/5 and also favourite (:

    -blackstar

  • 4 years ago

    by DarkKnight

    This is depression ..............thank you

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Absolutely! And anyone who's suffered will be nodding their heads along to this.
    All the very best and take care,
    Ben

  • 6 months ago

    by 2luv

    Your poem inspires me to write,
    it tells the author to get out and
    fight,
    you may not understand today,
    but from the door get out the way,
    you don't know how or when
    but if you want it open
    someones bound to kick it in..

    anyway good stuff you got there, insight. you got it right.