I like it alot my fav part was :

No more wishing for the past
It wasn't meant to be
It didn't seem to last,
So I have to set him free.

it reminds me of my ex ;(

The last line is so true, reminds me of my ex as well

Besides a few small grammatical errors it was really good.

Nice poem!!

Very nice. keep writing

Man, I really like it too!! It show a lot for those you have lost someone great in their lives and lost them in a bad way... I can relate in a lot of ways!!

Aww this piece is really cute! The thing I really love about this piece is the emotion in it just pours out and I love that! Some ppl really have a hard time using their poetry to exress themselves but you are def not one of them! Great job! 5/5
Loni

I like memorize this poem i read it all the time

love it

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THough I don't like reading sad poems or even poems of a "lost love", but I saw many comments of this poem of yours and wanted to read it for myself. I liked it.

Wow soooo beautiful i truly love it!

Love this poem, i went through exactly this a couple days ago but with a girl. :]

thanks fors postin it :]

It's really nice
thanks Rachelle

There are various grammatical errors that I think you might have overlooked. I'm bored and I liked this poem a lot so I'll check it out :) I'll also add any suggestions. They are just suggestions though... I still love it either way.

Inside
by Rachelle

Bottled up inside
are the words I never said
The feelings that I hide
The lines u never read.

You can see it in my eyes
(You can) read it on my face
Trapped inside are lies
Of the past I can't replace.

These memories that linger
Won't seem to go away
Why can't I (just) be happier? [flows better I think]
Today(')s a brand-new day.

Yesterdays are over
Even though the hurting('s) not
Nothing last(s) forever
I must Cherise(cherish) what I've got.

Don't take my love for granted
For soon it will be gone
all (you) every (ever) wanted
(Was) the love u thought you'd won.

The hurt I'm feeling
Won't disappear over night
But someway, somehow,
Everything will (be) all right. [also flows a bit better]

No more wishing for the past
It wasn't meant to be
It didn't seem to last,
So I have to set him free.

^^I personally LOVE the last stanza :)
"So, I have to set him free"
Is my favorite line! The last stanza definitely builds the tension towards this quote. It's brilliant :-P Great write! 5/5

Wow that was a great poem. i think you should put a little more description. otherwize i liked it 5/5

GREAT POEM
5/5

K im commenting again cuz wow you are so amazing i love this poem it shows your pain and struggles! so beautiful remember im always here for you!!!!!!!!! keep writing for your talent is too amazing to loose!

Deep great job..

Deep great job..

Good poem, keep up the good work, got to go to work now, take luck.

A thoughtful and beautiful write. excellent flow and form. the first four lines were perfect, a great opener. keep writing you have great talent. 5/5.

-Ashlei.