I really like this poem. Seriously....this is my favorite ofv yours. It gives off a great message, yet, it is still written beautifully, YET, you still put alot of you into it. Excellent write!
I gave a 5

Loni

You did an amazing on this. i really enjoyed reading this. the flow was good, and the message was clear throughout. this was very inspirational. i loved it.

Wow....i liked it....i find it very inspirational

This one is very inspiring. i love how it flows together and the words fit very well. keep it up!!

It's good thinking for someone your age but remember this piece of advice: Don't use too many I's to show your narrating a first person poem, all you do is continueally tell the reader over and over again that the narrator is speaking form their point of view and eventually people will get tired of it, or you will have people that will say it's good even though they may not even like it. Always back up your point with a metaphor or imagery, instead of explaining in the next line why you said something in the line before it.

Omgoodness! love it! it is so inspiring, and love the format and flow. keep it up! KM