I loved this poem. I know you said it wasn't too good, but I thought it was beautiful.

"This all sounds good, sounds so great,
Me and you on a life-long date..."

^^ Those two lines perfected this poem. I cannot begin to explain how much I liked them.

You have a wonderful piece here. Great job. :]

``Briana

I love this poem.
It seemed to be slightly more lyrical to me, and I could imagine it in a song, not a bad thing!

'Let's drive with the top down,
As we wave goodbye to our hometown.'

I loved these two lines, they are m favourite, all though the flow is lost a little on them, maybe too many syllables in the second line..

Still, what a poem great work, keep it up.

Sole x

This is absolutely beautiful.. I know a lot of people may tell you it's clique, but I'm not going to tell you that. Because, love poems are love poems. Lots of love poems are clique!! Anyways, this poem was simply beautiful and had a wonderful flow to it. Great work. 5/5.

Aw this is such a sweet poem.. gosh i've wished i could do this at one point in time. this poem is a bit simple but simple is always good. i love reading these kinds of poems.so keep it up :) ..

5/5

This is a very cute, and yet romantic poem. I enjoyed this poem

This is really sweet, in a [good] simple kind of way. The flow was smooth for the majority of the piece except for my favorite lines: 'Let's drive with the top down,
As we wave goodbye to our hometown.' Maybe there are too many syllables in the second line? Idunno. Anyways, great write.

Aww.. this is so cute! i like this poem alot, the emotion is strong and the flow is flawless, a simple yet enjoyable read :D great work!

Here I am, here I stand
Waiting to take your hand.
Take my hands, watch my face
Baby, let's get outta this place!
=> This stanza is really good one. The flow is good and reading it made me feel excited.

Let's run away, let's be free!
It'll just be you and me.
I don't know where we'll go,
That's something only we'll know.
=> This second one is nice too. I got a feeling this poem is about young couple. Maybe the feeling came from expression "let's run away". Running away without knowing a destination...that's something very dangerous. If my little sister would write a poem with this expression, I would get worried! :P

Stopping here, stopping there
Life's a breeze and without a care.
Las Vegas is just ahead,
Elvis can marry us, even though he's dead.
=> Two first line were okay... But two last lines...maybe exactly "Las Vegas" turn me off... I start seeing bright advertisement lights everywhere...casino, poker....

This all sounds good, sounds so great,
Me and you on a life-long date...
It's a feeling you just can't beat.
This feeling of being dreamed off my feet.
=> I didn't like the last stanza.. I can not explain logically why.. But I just feel the ending was not something (even I can not define what, LOL) what I expected.

Over all, it was lovely poem, a dream about American young love.

A good piece well written with a lot of good imagery.
"Baby, let's get outta this place!" - I don't feel like the word “outta” really works hear out of would be more sophisticated.

Except for this the poem was very good until the last stanza which I feel let the whole poem down I really feel it was more the last line the rest seemed to be really good. A good piece but could be improved upon. 4/5

Everyone has own way to express their thoughts and u probably one who can truly express in different way,, i could picture the words and all the lines was absolutely very dedicated and it touches in my heart.. i love the way u write.. its perfect flowing and it written so well.. keep on writing 5/5

This was such a refreshing poem. I've read so many sad poems on this site lately, but this one was so fun. I'm glad that you wrote this. The Elvis line was great XD. 5/5 For sure.

btw Thank you for your comment. I really do appreciate it.

This was so beautiful. i love it so much. the flow and sturcture were so good. this poem touched me so deeply. i'm adding it to my favorites. 5/5 keep wrighting

Aww! Cute! I really enjoyed reading this piece. It is well-written and very well-organized. Thats what I liked about it the most. I also really love the originality of it. Great write! 5/5