Comments : Wake The Night

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Waiting for the sun to rise
    Wake the night that I despise
    Watching shadows on my wall
    Trying to forget it all"

    Wow, what a captivating stanza! Really got me interested in this poem.

    "Songs of dark and songs of night
    Blurring my so impaired sight
    Stars are leering in the clouds
    Glaring down without a sound"

    ^Such descriptions and the words you used really blow me away, I love how you wrote, "Songs of dark and songs of night"

    "Trees are mourning in the rain
    Never easing all my pain
    Voices running through my mind
    Listening as my thoughts unwind"

    I love how you really got me into this, your rhyming and flow is perfect, and you really showed the emotions that you were feeling.

    "Waiting for all sense to leave
    Nothing that I canâ??t perceive"

    ^Just delete that ?? thing, it happens sometimes when you have apostrophes in certain words......

    Ovearll, nice job, really enjoyed this. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Katie

    The flow is amazing. Emotion is transferred to me so easily. Great work, keep it up!