Ahh, this is very honest and moving, I remember the title from when I said it yesterday :) this is beautiful

Oh just one thing 'tempts' not 'temps'
unless you're talking about the temps we know ^__^
5/5

Same thing as I always say. Beautiful piece.. you did a amazing job being open and showing that you care for this person, and that would be it. Rhyme, flow... amazing. Keep up the great work, 5/5.

He will really love this jen. it was sweet and awsome at the same time.5/5
**harlea

Great emotions, you can tell you really care for this person. I love the rhyming, it all flows so nicely. I like the additude in every verse. Love it, 5/5!

-mandy :)

Aaawww....i loved ur poem...this is such a beautiful and honest down to earth poem...which is really true...i loved it down to the very last line...i knw how u feel..cuz ill be to prepared to do this for evry person i loved.and i can c u r doin it...5/5

Very emotional poem. It flows very well. Good one.

Beautfuly said. such a honest and heartfelt poem. i love how you explained all the ways you would save him. true love. very sincere. keep it up......5/5

I really like this! It's bittersweet in a way, perfect. keep up the good work!

All your poems thus far have been very powerful- something I always look for besides originality.