Comments : Punctuation

  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    That was brilliant.

    First off the title automatically intrigued me to this piece for writing so that was an up side.

    The first stanza pulled me in and the rest flowed fnicely enough, with enough interesting words, to keep me going for the whole thing.

    It was a lovely metaphor and an ingenius poem.

    Five out of five.

  • 15 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Haha, I thought this was really unique and rather humorous. I love the punctuation you used to accent your poem. Also, the vocabulary was excellent.

    B.C. to A.D. to abbreviate future generations.
    I thought this line was really clever. The whole poem just has that clever metaphor to it. Ifyou didn't know it was supposed to be about punctuation, and used as a metaphor for life, I would have been utterly perplexed. fabulous job on keeping me entertained =]

    ~Ash aka Romancing

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^If enernity ^ was that suppose to be eternity?

    I think the poem was unique, thought provoking and clever. it flowed well and was an interesting read. Loved the word choice!

  • 15 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    I liked this a lot. It was written flawlessly, and your word choice was amazing. I happen to love questions in a poem, because it keeps the reader wondering, and questioning, which is always good.

    This piece was beautiful. 5/5

    ``Briana

  • 15 years ago

    by Bugg

    That was brilliant! The flow was amazing and of course, as all your poems are, it was super-good (yes, I tend to make up my own words...)! What else can I say? Hm, nothing, it was that good. :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wow... this is brilliant... simply superb... very unique... One of your best writes...

    A refreshing read...
    Excellent write...

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Thank you Rachel I have edited

  • 15 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    It is very creative of you to actually incorporate the title into the poem and use words like "sentence or period" to describe a message in an abstract way.

    "Or will the enlightened turn to the dark,
    To end eternity with a question mark?"
    ^a very intriguing line that I can relate to

    "Or must every individual live in there own periods? "

    ^Excellent line and a great way to the end this poem. I believe it's true that we each live in our own periods. Then once in a while we try to break free.

    Great job!

  • 15 years ago

    by donk2ymouth

    I've just come home from seeing Batman: The Dark Knight.

    bare with me here.
    What I can get from this poem, it has a bit to do with religion.
    what is has to do with religion I don't know.
    Are we speaking of too much religion? or too little, the questions you ask in this piece led to much more of my own.
    I don't know if I'm going out of topic, or out of standard, my mind is kind of fuzzy, and un-punctuated.

    I've always been a sucker for poetry speaking about poetry.

    good work.
    sorry for the confused comment.

  • 15 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Wow that poem is amazing. it just shows that some people are meant to write and with the creativity and unique method of portraying this idea, i can conclude (in my own mind at least) that you are one of these people. keep up the great work, i look forward to more :D

  • 15 years ago

    by Nicko

    Well thought out poem Mr Michael yet I expect no less from such a clever word smith, quiet the best poem I’ve read for a while. Nice use of rhyme and metre and plenty to stimulate the intellectual juices.

    Cheerz Nicko

  • 12 years ago

    by christopher

    This would be a great lesson for kids going kindergarten really michael come on this poem is shallow and neither implicit or explicit shown no character or imagery. there is no substance or feeling to this poem. it is not even a good prayer. punctuation is essential in our english today and is used to bring a persons voice and feeling alive in the prose, poem or story.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Very clever - I'm a big fan of the rhyming scheme (reminds me of some of my stuff, actually) and I think too few attempt rhyme these days. I understand if it isn't done well, it is usually bad, but when it is good it is excellent - and this is excellent. Anyway, I wonder what Shakespeare, Wordsworth, Blake or Hardy etc etc would make of the current lack of rhyming verse, lol