Comments : Woud you like to hear a secret.

  • 9 years ago

    by ibleedregret

    I love this poem, Its so well writen,
    good work hunni =]

    xoxo

  • 9 years ago

    by Serena

    Extremely well written. 5/5 all the way. Beautiful job =)

  • 9 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Mmm , waht a peace of poem , relaly good expressed one ,
    it is the first one i read and i dont mind that their is no rhyming ,

    your flow of events, and feelings, jsut capture my attention and i still keep reading , and reading
    jsut very good one ,

    indeed, good

    and in a another hand , i dont know what depress you but i hope you dotn cut for it ,
    you see yoursefl did cut fix the prob?
    i hope you listen to voice of reason , depression is bad, try to get away from it:)

  • 9 years ago

    by claire

    I can relate, i love it 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by HvN

    Can definitley relate, great job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Finding myself

    This poem is really good
    i feel the same way sometimes

  • 9 years ago

    by Zara Baines

    Very nicely written

  • 9 years ago

    by Heba

    Wow,totally loved this piece.It is the same thing that I am suffering from, I have been hiding my sadness and depression for along time and I am sick and tired of this.

  • 9 years ago

    by Nobody

    Im utterly SPEECHLESS.................................................................................................................................................................................................okay this poem is beautiful i know how it feels to always hide and pretend that everything is alright you expressed emotion wonderfully this poem is going in my fav! 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Craig Morris

    It says how I have felt so well, wanting to tell everyone im not the happy clown, but at the same time wanting to tell nobody.
    amazing xx

  • 9 years ago

    by ShaunaMarie

    Very nice.
    keep up the good work.

    <33
    ALmostHadYou

  • 9 years ago

    by Tangible heartache

    This was beautifully written. The whole poem

    "Would you like to hear a secret,
    Something I'll bet you never knew,
    A secret deep inside me,
    I've been hiding it from you."

    My favorite stanza, and also true. Shes hiding something from everyone, something no on knows.

    "Do you see this smile,
    So huge upon my face,
    My eyes are big and sparkling,
    Everything seems in its place."

    This was also very good. Rhyming was good, and shows shes a good actor. xD

    "I'll bet you didn't know,
    As I close my bedroom door,
    There's something I've been hiding,
    I let out as I fall to the floor."

    She lets out all her emotions when she is alone, breaking down when no one can see. good.

    "You can't hear my silent sobs,
    Or see the cuts I make,
    You don't know the things I do,
    When I don't have to be fake."

    No one sees the pain shes in, and nothing she does. She has a fake mask that everyone has bought.

    "The secret I've been hiding,
    The one that I hide best,
    I never wanted you to worry,
    Mother, I'm horribly depressed."

    Now I think I like this stanza the best. Because she tells her mother, instead of friend or what ever, the wording was superb and just excellent.

    I loved the whole poem, and it was just wonderful. You obviously have my vote. I hope you do as well on your others as you did this one!! Keep it up!!

    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Crippled Wing

    Wow this is a wonderful poem!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by SoUrNameIsTia

    Awe =[
    thats sad. but really good........its going into my favs.

    great rhyming! =]

    5/5

    ~tia

  • 9 years ago

    by TheBarefootedCowgirl

    Wow i love it i can totally relate to it.
    fantasticly written, this is amazing work!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by LikeItOrNotIAmMe

    This is a really good poem....

  • 9 years ago

    by Chanel

    Wow, i reallly liked this, it was moving, and i dont really want to admit it but my eyes got watery as i read the last four lines. im really glad i read it.

  • 8 years ago

    by maya raphael

    This is really deep and very nicely written:]

  • 8 years ago

    by AnCi

    Amazing poem! And I can remember feeling this way myself :( All the cuts and cries for help that no one ever really hears.. Amazing poem!

  • 8 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow this poem really stood out for me. ilike the idea of how...what seems to be a pretty perfect innocent girl who is a depressed girl in the closet. The usage of simple words really captured me as a reader to feel the how the protagonist is feeling

    Excellent Job
    5/5