Comments : Twist in the story

  • 9 years ago

    by Hopelessly Devoted to You

    This poem was different to me but in a good way, did a good ob with this, keep up the good work!

  • 9 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow, i loved this. i can relate with it almost completely.

    "All I have to say to you is
    that you got what you intended.
    I payed for my mistakes and yours.
    How do you like how it ended?"

    i loved the ending. excellent job.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ari

    I like the pattern you've set up in your poem. It's nice and it flows well. good poem. It was really moving.

    5/5

    xo

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Try and reason.
    Where did it get you?
    Now your two steps back.
    When will you be through?"

    ^Love how you ask these questions, and this whole poem is so amazing, you did a fabulous job! The title is great and you really drew me into this poem, nice work! Keep writing, always and forever!

  • 9 years ago

    by halie

    "Tell me, am I supposed to be happy?
    When everything I do or want
    causes me aching pain and anguish.
    It all comes back to taunt me. "

    i can relate to this ^^ in sooooo many ways
    i loved it!!
    :D
    you did an AMAZING job
    the flow was perfect
    5/5

    -halie

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Amazing how far you went with it.
    Told me I was the one but proposed to her.
    Sorry, she accidentally now knows the truth.
    It's off. To the wedding that is referred.

    ^^^^ sweet revenge! I liked this stanza a lot, Tabi!
    I have seen you make more than one poem about this, I am guessing you hve been through this in real life, if so: what a loser that guy is! He has lost, not you!

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Hmm, thats messed up but people can be really mean a hurtful. The wording was great and the emotion was strong. I really liked this poem. I gave it a 5/5. I saw nothing wrong with it.

  • 9 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    This was a bit more simple than your other poems but still the emotion is so very strong in your words. This presents the mood of "Yeah it hurt, but I am still standing and its time to pay"
    I like that attitude and strength.
    I like how thats conveyed
    "Amazing how far you went with it.
    Told me I was the one but proposed to her.
    Sorry, she accidentally now knows the truth.
    It's off. To the wedding that is referred. "
    5/5
    laura