Comments : Miracle.

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    Uhm wow! I could just feel the love oozing from this poem. Its obvious how deeply you care for this person. I always say expect the unexpected because when you least expect it, wonderful people walk into your life and shine light on everything. The emotions were deep and easy to relate with. I do think some words seemed out of place like if was forced in there but it didnt affect the flow that much. Your descriptions were beautiful and painted flawless imagery in my mind. The last stanza was a wonderful way to end it because it tied in everything together nicely. Well done. *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Wow. This piece is written beautifully. I love the honesty, and the real emotion coming from the words. It's obvious you care deeply about this person. It's amazing how one person can completely change your life, isn't it? They're able to make you happy, regardless of what has happened previously. This is a wonderful dedication to those special people, specifically, the one you wrote this poem for.

    5/5

    ``Briana

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    You used you or another form of the word 17 times. Me/my 13 times. I was used 6 times. It sounds more like a letter than a poem. The flow is nonexistent. You have used fragmented sentences, and should not begin the first line of a stanza with and...

  • 15 years ago

    by Perfection

    Sweet of you to dedicate a poem to this person. I think there is no better way to express it than through a poem..

    Nice cakes =)

  • 15 years ago

    by Austin

    Nicely done. Sounded great and the syllables fit perfectly most of the time.

  • 15 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Very nice sentiment expressed here. In first stanza "fill" to "fills".
    I still have trouble with the metre in your work so it reads more like prose then poetry, for me it needs the rhythm to make it a really good poetic read. Asalways an opinion

  • 15 years ago

    by Tormented

    Awwww
    That is a very sweet peome
    [:
    That person seems very special!
    It was very lovely and descriptive.
    Nice Job

    --x

  • 15 years ago

    by jLegendc

    Awwww... if this poem was dedicated to me.. i'd melt with how you described how you feel with this person's presence... i wish someone would say "YOu'll linger in my heart forever" to me... the word linger clearly delivers such strong feelings...
    your poem sounds like a love poem bcoz of the way you wrote it... the words mixed with such passionate emotions are carried throughout the poem.. though it doesn't rhyme... it stills sounds so good! you really appreciate this person.. i wish someone would appreciate me... but oh well. GREAAT POEM!!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    It would be a super awsome poem if i didnt read poetry all the time. I mean no insult but its just that many poems are the exact same one as this. I also beleive that you could have had better description or relate your love to something with a metaphor. Remember i mean no insult to you and that these are all just my opinions nice poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was truly beautiful. It takes a wonderful friendship and an equally wonderful person to have a poem such as this written about them. You could totally feel the [friendship] love in this piece, and it was lovely to read.

    I felt your most powerful stanza was the last one. It was like a climax; the best held until the end, and the added line is just the icing on the cake.

    Nicely done.

  • 15 years ago

    by Empathy

    Very strong emotion throughout the poem that proves this person is truly a miracle to you. I really liked the simplicity it had while I read it and thought it may be simple in thought, it is truthful, honest, and pure from the heart.

    I am sure this person would be delighted to see this, as I was delighted reading it. Nice work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sole

    Beautiful. I only wish I had a great friend who could write a lovely poem like this about me :)
    That's an awesome poem, and I don't generally enjoy non-rhyming poems.
    I especially liked the first 3 lines, they conjured up such a great image and the reader can really feel the butterflies.
    Great writing once again!

    Sole x

  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Supporting me through flawless and dreadful times.

    Using flawless to describe those times was unique.

    Awwwwww! I know whoooooo! ^______-

    Tee hee. He must loooove it. :D Five out of five.

  • 15 years ago

    by Justin

    I really liked your ending of the poem..... just seem to like complete it... I didnt see ANYTHING wrong heh but i did get alot of emotion out of it and whoever it is must be a very important person in your life that you should never let go =D

  • 15 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Third stanza. Double use of care ... Grab a thesaurus and use another word? And I felt like it was the beginning of that stanza that cut the flow off short, but it starts to get on its way again later.

    You've gratified my every illusion, wish, hope.
    `It bothers me that you don't have an "and" there. It's necessary really, since it's not like I haven't done that before. But for some reason it seems weird...

    It also bothered me the double use of miracle at the very end of your piece so soon and so close to each other.

    But other than that, I feel like this piece was better than the one I previously read. Though, again, not your best, it was definitely better. I felt like you could've used more than just telling the reader about how much you feel grateful, since, if you're writing a poem for them and about them that's so optimistic, of course we know you care about them.

    But then when we're writing pieces like this for our friends and those we love, I guess that's just the same things we want to repeat over and over again for them to know.

    It was a nice write.
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 15 years ago

    by Heba

    Wow,it was really touching and beautiful.I just rembered my best friends when I read it.