"Cradle me softly as I sleep
My angel I need you so
Past this grave I cannot see
These memories forever flow"
My favorite lines. They fit together. I can relate to these most of all.
The end, I found it a little weak. It needs a little more, power. I will walk away from this unsatisfied.
I like the rest of this piece. Just one little issue, the vocabulary, sometimes its creative, sometimes it is plain. Just work on that.
Other than all of this, i love this poem. It's beautiful.
I think this is a very detailed and beautifully written piece.. I think it could be even better if you put more detail, length and more depth into the wordings...
more creativness perhaps, but other then that it was nice and very modest
The flow here was just flawless! It made the poem so much more interesting to read and was clear in my mind. I could feel the emotin you expressed and nothing seemed forced or out of place here making this poem a wonderful read.
A wonderful poem. very creative! i loved the rhythm, it all fit so well. the title was perfect also. this poem was different, very unique. these are the kinds of poems i enjoy reading the most. you did an excellent job on this. keep writing! 5/5.
Hey this was incredible. i thought i was reading an tradgically beautifully story that flowed and then i realized the flow rhymed as well. Perfectly. And i feel your pain, i wish my angel would console me in my dark times like right now! lol but seriously wonderful. I like how it wasn't just a cliche unhappy ending with pessimism. Questions are the honest way to end when you dont know. When you find the hope to end it happily with confidence though, dont hold back. keep in touch i will be reading your other works if you wouldnt mind continuing to read mine. keep writing.