My Unseen Child

by Wolf Haines   Aug 13, 2008


Oh creature most mannered mild,
In my image styled.

Born from emotions run wild,
A product of passions compiled.

Hope on your shoulders piled,
A vision of memories once smiled.

Custody case filed.
My unseen child.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Lyn

    A very good poem, it's strength is in its brevity. Poems are like sermons they don't need to be long to communicate the message or the emotions. The last line got me in the heart. So sad from such promise. We need to be careful where we plant our seeds. Thank you.

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    That is the most painful thing..not been able to see your child. A moving write and I like your choice of words which portrays your pain..take care.

  • 9 years ago

    by shenoa

    Great flow and I liked your choice of words.

  • 9 years ago

    by x Mo x

    That was very good. Very rhythmic. I liked the subtle beat it had to it when I said it out loud.

    The message was very cryptic. (I hear that's a good thing though.) I didn't exactly understand where it was going, and the only way I understood it at the end was because of my family situation. The poem was really good and kind of showed me the other side of the cases I fight in.

    Great job!

    -Mo-

  • 9 years ago

    by TheBarefootedCowgirl

    So simple and short, yet so much emotion can de displayed.
    great work 5/5